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RAGE IN [T]HIS AGE IN [T]HIS RAGE
fractalcore

against the machine
 1
we stomp, we kick;
 2
ass we imagine
 3
[of] those we loathe.
 4
 
 
drop a penny, a dime,
 5
a quarter, damn dozen;
 6
no water for the thirst.
 7
 
 
run for life or run
 8
for position --
 9
what's the point?
 10
what's in --
 11
or the question?
 12
 
 
public face, integrity --
 13
always a collition;
 14
pub[l]ic hair unkempt
 15
or otherwise...
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no votes for all reasons;
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be wise.
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written 07/06/08
http://poetrycritical.net/read/49268/
thanks, Aziel.
: )

3 Sep 08

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run for life or run  
for position --
what's the point?
what's in --
or the question?  
    
public face, integrity --
always a collition

be wise.     am trying.

      ... best lines.
            ;      now, this ain't hard to comprehend. i dig this.
 — enkantada

the people always look in the mirror and see the demons of their own making; Politics and Religion are mirrors; break the mirror and go for broke to elect or beleive in just plain realEYEsed folk : timely writeeous write fractaliscious
 — AlchemiA

you speckin' z language again
i love to listen
 — Liliana

Your skills with off-beat rhythm and sound and semi-rhymes are almost subtle enough to be unintentional.

You're very good at expressing thought.
 — technomancer

i love rage,
and the machine renegades.

you've some for this poem,
nice fract.
=-)
 — jenakajoffer

slight title edit there.
: )
 — fractalcore

hi, enkantada.

"be wise." i'm trying, too.
really good to see your comment on this.
i keep my mind off politix 'coz it's so hard to comprehend.

thank you for taking the time.
: )
 — fractalcore

thank you so much, AlchemiA.

sorry for the delayed response.
been really busy these past few days.

yeah, we all should go for broke, hehe.
: )
 — fractalcore

hi, Liliana.

yep, em speckin me language en
nuthin else. i luv to listen to meself speck, hehe.

thank you for the kind words.
: )
 — fractalcore

hi, technomancer.

those are really keen observations
of things i'm not even aware.

from now on i should be'ware.
thanks.
: )
 — fractalcore

ey, jenny!

pleasure to have you commenting.
i think this post is an ok thing with just
enough punch and kick to it but any
suggestions will be highly appreciated.

see you around.
: )
 — fractalcore

hmm...
: )
 — fractalcore

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