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When I'm with you, I feel at home.
 1
1000 miles away, yet my heart is at ease,
 2
Hearing the words you say, and the way you say them,
 3
The excitement in your voice and the smile on your face.
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Glazed over eyes, and your soft, interested attentiveness.
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Your cool confidence radiates, while your timidness holds you back,
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I listen and ponder, wondering what to think,
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I am captivated by your thoughts, intrigued by your experiences.
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Watching the clock, wondering where the night has gone,
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I am alone without you, and desire to be alone with you.
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Never before have I felt so close to someone I know so little,
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1000 miles from home, yet closer than I have ever felt before.
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9 Sep 08

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Comments:

line 10 is def a winner. poetic structure is a lil off but a solid poem none the less.
 — jrnuzum

Is this for a pen pal? It is a little open for interpretation. Like the  poem overall
 — themolly

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