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Deal or no deal?
alexisboram

let me drown
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in your guitar,
 2
and make love
 3
with your past
 4
 
 
let me kiss your
 5
battle scars,
 6
and  suck your
 7
calloused thumb.
 8
 
 
you don't have to entice
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these legs will spread freely
 10
 
 
you don't have to ask
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these hands are excited for the job
 12
 
 
for $ 100 baby,
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i am yours.
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21 Sep 08

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wow, i didn't know howie played guitar.
 — jenakajoffer

Ahh women... sigh.
 — technomancer

who's howie?
 — unknown

who's howie, jen?
 — unknown

nazi scum, you should be struck off.
 — unknown

L12 comes off as awkward, but this clever and i'm a sucker for clever. open the fuckin case already will ya
 — flourides

alexisboram, deal..
or no deal?

i'm sure you could use the hundred bucks, but i bet you'd change your life if you had sex with the banker.  
 — jenakajoffer

thanks
 — alexisboram

oh well...
; )
 — fractalcore

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