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23 years ago she came to Gullygham
herself emersed in mourning
she came with her personality
her presence
and her love
to live in a mourning family
to be the heart and soul of a wider
we all know the heeding from the bible
death comes like a thief in the night
hers came on a holiday
our believing senses speak
and our human hearts bleed

1 Oct 08

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I'm not sure I understand: "our believing senses speak"

I would remove "heart" from L7. Also, you say she came (L3) .. so her presence is establised there and maybe you should remove L4 so that it instead reads: "she came with her personality and her love" etc. And maybe use the word "greater" instead of "wider".
 — SarahMichele