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i'm sorry to say this, because i can see this is probably a personal issue for you, but stick to thinking about it. maybe talking to your friend about it. but don't write poetry about it.
the subject is fine for poetry, but when you write it this terribly it's really not worth trying.
don't quit your day job.
— unknown
wow the username is just as funny as the poem.
— unknown
This is amazingly crowded with cliches... take the time to think of new ways to say things, otherwise you are saying nothing new at all.
Lines 1,2,3,5,6,7,10,11,12,17,18,22 are all cliches or have cliches in them.
— joshcoops
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