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a hand:fool of mod
fractalcore

so --
 1
 
 
haywire skyward
 2
lipping?
 3
 
 
limping,
 4
     red drip,
 5
            pen=blade
 6
                   wonting
 7
support, so-posed, bent
 8
on tricky sticky
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                         leap
 10
 
 
           up!
 11
 
 
the side-ways could
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harm; the shoulder[s,]
 13
blades, crack
 14
 
 
keeps, the ice
 15
                 foe-cussed
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       on the bruise
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    on the weathered
 18
soul withered a-gain --
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        [and] a-gem:
 20
 
 
         "soul" again
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          ...keeps it
 22
          ...keep it
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          ...key it
 24
 
 
          ...eat
 25
 
 
with your lips kept still.
 26




errant ewe sew a-mused ass eye Om?
: )

29 Oct 08

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this should be banned -- a-muse-sing with lips kept still -- press-us skyward soul again
 — AlchemiA

sassy! might suggest 25 broken off from 22-4... 'k? que? 'kay?
 — chuckle_s

hi, Alc.

i wonder why this still isn't closed like a thread.
skyward is the only way to go and it's every
direction there is.

thanks for always stopping by.
: )
 — fractalcore

thanks, chuck.
how does it look now?
: )
 — fractalcore

and 1994,
thanks for faving.
: )
 — fractalcore

nice creation, Fractalcore. i like this, cheeky but in such a good way, in a way that can't help but be noted as cleverly done, something i say about too many of your works but it is true i promise ...

thanks for writing this.
 — listen

hi again, listen.

thank you so much.
: )
 — fractalcore

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