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when love surrenders

a heart fails
blood seeping out holes
discerning thoughts
disrupt the system
as truth watches on
with a twisted smile
whispering false words
justice commits loyalty
the cause for betrayals
stability becomes the
biggest desertion
and pride, shame-faced,
hangs his head
below a rippling white flag
unable to watch as a comrade, courage,
crawls into a dark corner
and withers
strength, falteringly,
fights to lift a hand
for eternity to wave
a final farewell
love has surrendered
life is suffering

11 Nov 08

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its strong
 — deadwinter

i love this sweetie.
 — brokenarrows

Good one. But I think this one kinda sounds like one of those "before I die" type of poems.

Referencing to things such as a "white light" or "lightness" of some sort can only enhance this beauty.
 — CheBourdain7

thanks. anybody else? i feel like its missing something but im not all too sure what?
 — silentspring

pretty good
 — unknown

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 — unknown

umm okay.... anybody else?
 — silentspring