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when love surrenders
silentspring

a heart fails
 1
blood seeping out holes
 2
beating
 3
        ir-reg-u-la-r-ly
 4
discerning thoughts
 5
disrupt the system
 6
as truth watches on
 7
with a twisted smile
 8
whispering false words
 9
 
 
justice commits loyalty
 10
the cause for betrayals
 11
stability becomes the
 12
biggest desertion
 13
and pride, shame-faced,
 14
hangs his head
 15
below a rippling white flag
 16
unable to watch as a comrade, courage,
 17
crawls into a dark corner
 18
and withers
 19
 
 
strength, falteringly,
 20
fights to lift a hand
 21
for eternity to wave
 22
a final farewell
 23
 
 
love has surrendered
 24
life is suffering
 25

11 Nov 08


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its strong
 — deadwinter

i love this sweetie.
 — brokenarrows

Good one. But I think this one kinda sounds like one of those "before I die" type of poems.

Referencing to things such as a "white light" or "lightness" of some sort can only enhance this beauty.
 — CheBourdain7

thanks. anybody else? i feel like its missing something but im not all too sure what?
 — silentspring

pretty good
 — unknown

Nothing to do with this poem: Just wanted to say you are an amazing person. Smart talented nice(so NICE!). You deserve good things in life and I really hope you get them. Don't you dare dismiss this, I'm only writting what I have observed. This is fact. I'm not a stalker and will not view this page again. Good day:)
 — unknown

umm okay.... anybody else?
 — silentspring

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