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----{@
fractalcore

                 fractal thoughts
 1
       brush the moss-haired stones
 2
            with toe-to-toe bristles
 3
                   r e l e a s e d
 4
            from the grips of shoes
 5
              or happy flip flops --
 6
 
 
         dreamy petals ride the wind
 7
     ever so lightly for lack of shelter,
 8
     not needing it like the child in you
 9
    on a sun-day, or rain-day, perhaps
 10
 
 
        i should let youth be and run
 11
much faster, before i get another chance
 12
         to drown, and learn to swim
 13
  towards the safety of not just knowing
 14
         but really touching your skin
 15
          of countless golden days --
 16
 
 
         i'll face the heat, crawl, burn,
 17
            and rise just to meet you
 18
       and bathe in your magnificence
 19
        where you frolic so effortlessly
 20
 
 
      or search for you in a black forest
 21
          and linger there for its fruits
 22
                        and ours
 23
 
 
           lest i be mad beyond repair
 24
and drive this long-overdue task of toiling
 25
                   to a drastic halt.
 26


                         for you.



                           ____
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                          : )

6 Jan 09

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i think, fc, that sometimes in the middle of this it's like when you're running too fast and slightly stumble. the freedom of voice in this, though, makes up for it and makes me want to read it again just for the what's of it.

nice read.
 — geckodrome

Rather odd.
 — MattPat

thanks, mike.

i know what you mean and felt that, too, after
writing. i was caught between going for brevity
and not missing out on the word-tokens that are
familiar to me and the recipient of the piece.

you always have a good sense of things such
as this. will have to do some tweaking as soon
as i can.

thanks again.
: )
 — fractalcore

hi, MattPat.

thanks for reading and
may i ask why you find it
rather odd?
: )
 — fractalcore

nisetru, thanks for faving.

any thoughts?
: )
 — fractalcore

Aziel, thanks, too, for faving.

any thoughts, please?
how you been, by the way?
: )
 — fractalcore

love your poem very much
 — nisetru

This struck me first of all as joyous.  I have nothing to say about changes at all, only that sense of joy and breathing (hope you understand what I mean) all the way through.  
 — Isabelle5

thanks again, nisetru.
: )
 — fractalcore

hi, Isabelle5.

thanks for reading. i think i'd already done some
tweaking in the 3rd strophe before you logged in.
there's actually a lot of longing embedded in the
piece but with, of course, with equally numerous
bits of joy, too.

appreciate the feedback.
: )
 — fractalcore

chuckle_s,

thank you for faving, man.
: )
 — fractalcore

Yessa!  Happy lovey-dovey words 4 the new year, inDEED, Frac!  :-)
 — starr

I LOVE the happy flip flops in L6.  I wish mine were as happy.  I usually trip over them when I get out of the shower and what comes out of my mouth looks like your title.  :-)
 — starr

You could have done better than 'golden'
and i reckon 'so effortlessly' has to go
'black forest'? aw c/mon

I really like 'mad beyond repair'
great poem

Your friend.
Simon Templar
 — unknown

dis rocks frac
 — unknown

joy-us 'n flower-full fract-all
 — AlchemiA

hi, starr.

happy new year and i wish you'd never
trip over your flip flops again. there's
prolly a bunch of lovely flowers sprawled
around your shower, eh?

thanks for faving.
: )
 — fractalcore

hi, Simon Templar.

sorry, the words you mentioned were
deliberate moves which i can't just discard
no matter how cliched or lousy they read
here; i completely understand your response
to the way it's written though and i really
appreciate your time for giving this a shot
and i'm glad i did not disappoint you all
throughout, my friend.

thanks so much for the feedback.
: )
 — fractalcore

other unknown:

glad you liked it.
thanks.
: )
 — fractalcore

AlchemiA sir:

an honor to have your comments again.
thanks for faving.
: )
 — fractalcore

onesandzeros:

thank you, too, for reading
and faving.
: )
 — fractalcore

Yay!  #1!  Frac, what's the significance (if any) of the title's symbols?  Just curious.  Also, I moved my flip flops out to the hall as of this morning.  :-)
 — starr

rosebuddy
 — AlchemiA

hi again, starr.

the symbols are to be viewed
collectively as a flower.

something i learned from a friend, hehe.
: )
 — fractalcore

or, specifically, as what AlchemiA
just said, a rosebuddy.
: )
 — fractalcore

Like a rose, it blossmed - budding at the top
 — syrossoul

LOVE IT!  A Flower!  Of course!  
 — starr

i had to sign in to see what all the hype was about over this new 'flower'.  
nice to see you fract,
i'm sure you must know how delighted i am to read this
seeing how there are very few sTickYcAps n' gimmicks n' stuff, (i'm no good at reading that style as you know).  this is beautiful, congrats on such a great poem.

there are words i initially saw as removable but reading this again, 'as is' i decided it made no difference.  so there you have it.

=-)
 — jenakajoffer

touching your skin


of countless golden days..


mmmm marvelous conjunction in the minds eye... this searches for itself, as you speak it, and somewhere it loses itself to find itself.. embedded in another, to know itself..

oh, golden days... such skin..

a good read fract..
 — Mongrol

syrossoul:

thank you.
: )
 — fractalcore

starr:

thanks again.
: )
 — fractalcore

jenakajoffer:

so glad to see your comments here.
i meant for this piece to read as simple and
direct as i possibly could and i like(d) what i
came up with. i like the emotional condition
i am into right now as a matter of fact.

this may be one of those corners i turn at in
the course of my so-called existence and it's
just so good to get back to writing and learn
again.

thanks for dropping by.
: )
 — fractalcore

Mongrol:

thanks for dropping by, dude.
oh, if you've just seen and spent time with
an extraordinary person like her then you
would know exactly what i mean.

this piece is even an understatement and
too short a description of her. an epic would
have done more justice but this is the best
i could come up with right now.

...one of the rarest things i thank the
universe for and i'm just having my dose of
catharsis here.

: )
 — fractalcore

"Sink deep, sink deep
Beyond the ultimate dreams of all desire --
Beyond the uttermost limit
Of all that the craving spirit knows:
Then, then, oh then I shall be
As the inner flame of thy fire,

O fair immaculate rose of the world,
Rose of my Dream,
my Rose!" -William Sharp
 — syrossoul

ey, syrossoul.

what a reinforcement.
: )
 — fractalcore

and a beautiful, charming catharsis it is too fract :)
 — Mongrol

thanks again, Mong.
: )
 — fractalcore

hi, clmt.
(i bet you're the las unk there.)

i'm an asshole, too.
don't you find the following so poetic?
here:

Top Rated (expand)

    * 1. ----{@
    * 2. de-flowering
    * 3. These 'Theses'
    * 4. Gaslight
    * 5. From the Ceiling I Watch him Churn
    * 6. Kimiko
    * 7. Because Of The Flames
    * 8. the edge of me is the beginning of you
    * 9. the wind in sigh'd
    * 10. Alone in Autism
    * 11. Meeting Lao Tzu
    * 12. blue light bends like any other.
    * 13. Half Moon on Hannover street
    * 14. :::eskimo pie mesons:::
    * 15. Climax by Fire

@ around 10:25pm EST
and it's something they say
a found poem.

maybe i'm just getting fond of you;
nevermind the rating system or
censorship too much.

and thanks for stopping by.
: )
 — fractalcore

make that 9:25pm EST
January 7, 2009.
: )
 — fractalcore

"This struck me first of all as joyous.  I have nothing to say about changes at all, only that sense of joy and breathing (hope you understand what I mean) all the way through.  
— Isabelle5         &n bsp;[!]\"


hi again, Isabelle5.

i was rummaging for old comments/posts in poetryandpoet
when i ran into what mike bauer used to describe what his
"kelly" inspired me to write.

"unhappily happy, not sadly unsad"

was what he used then and i think the same line would fit
my current post here.

: )
 — fractalcore

i've read this about thirty times now, over the last couple days. seriously. i have yet to really form a worthwhile comment. but i will. oh yes, just you wait and seeeeeeeeeee
 — chuckle_s

hi, unknown.

i'm afraid i haven't met jw68 yet.
or have i?
: )
 — fractalcore

your words are different to mine fract, but yep i've spent time with someone as exratordinary as her, as my her is extraordinary to me.. i hope some of my pieces do her some justice - but like you say - mine are also far too short to do her the justice she deserves
 — Mongrol

hi there, chuckle_s.

you make me nervuz, man.
30 readings and no comments yet?
seems like you got some kick-ass
PC-bomb in your arsenal.

seriously, the flaws are very clear to
me even as i speak. i just can't get
around them for a long period, i tell
you that.

but i definitely wanna hear what
you got to say.

: )
 — fractalcore

hear it is:
























honk
 — chuckle_s

hi, Mong.



"touching your skin


of countless golden days..


mmmm marvelous conjunction in the minds eye... this searches for itself, as you speak it, and somewhere it loses itself to find itself.. embedded in another, to know itself..

oh, golden days... such skin..

a good read fract..
— Mongrol         &nbs p;[!]\"



i've got a lot to learn from every poet on
PC as i've got a lot to learn from this girl.

glad the you caught the fluctuating drift in
those lines and the whole piece in general.

: )
 — fractalcore

ah, chuckle_s.

you honky tonk man, hehe.
: )
 — fractalcore

vida:

thanks for faving.
any thoughts?
: )
 — fractalcore

I love fractals. I have a huge mandelbrot tatoo, Its from close to my belly button to my sternem, and goes like a cross, virtical, and fat side up down my chest.  The things huge, and its sick looking too.
  Anyway, what was meant by odd is its diction to syntax is smooth, yet slowed with complicated imagery. I find myself reading faster than I'm imagining, and the contrast of that effect is odd.  
 — MattPat

i'll take that as a huge compliment, MattPatt.
that's at least 2 dimensions you're connected
to in the experience.

there's actually a 3rd one only i and, possibly,
the recipient of this piece are privy to.

and a 4th one which absolutely only i know
about.

thanks for the comeback.
: )
 — fractalcore

Well the other is the transformative aspect of the imagery and topic, but also the fact that your talking about your child that you only get to see ever so often.  Am I right?
 — MattPat

no, there's no kids yet but only
the desire to have some with
this wonderful lady, if ever.

fractal thoughts and dreamy are
just some of the pointers alluding
to me and the recipient.

: )
 — fractalcore

it's growing!
i will have something substantial to say about this, but i sure am glad to have heard what others have said. particularly alchemia on the title. i considered it before the "rose" thing was mentioned, which i didn't see, and now with matt's comment there, my first impression i will share: it seemed to me as though the "@" was being pushed by the "----{" kinda like one of those shuffleboard cues. so anyway, yeah. i think this is your best you've posted here. no wonder all the favourite-ing!
ah-nold sez
i'll be back
 — chuckle_s

arnold?

didn't he turn funny at the latter part
of his career?

with that political stint to top it all, hehe.
thanks, chuckle_s.

i'll await your precious thoughts.
: )
 — fractalcore

precious thoughts, how gollum-y!

i'd already decided that this was a love-thing, and a "wtf am i doing i should just settle down already or miss the boat", but now with your comment there, the title looks like

candlelit dinner
a small box placed on the table
opened - a ring!
it is pushed across the table
"...?"
cool!
 — chuckle_s

sounds like a great analogy.

what i really did here was to incorporate
events and/or particulars in those events
that we shared. there were lots, you see,
so it was really hard to come up with this
and that pretty much explains the -- as
MattPat already said -- "complicated"
imagery and "oddness" of its interlacing
with the diction.

settling down is way too soon a concept
but not at all remote.

i'm just missing her, that's all.
: )
 — fractalcore

another fact is that she loves flowers
aside from nature in general.

"the child in you" means her carefree,
childlike disposition that i really love to
see.

: )
 — fractalcore

Kudos! Great read. I feel you man. Got a new post myself.
:))
 — raveneffect

ey thanks, raven.

long time no hear from you, eh?
good to have you back.

will check your new baby out.
; )
 — fractalcore

oh, it is wonderful to see this side of you.
a real treat.


a real treat.
i'm a goona rate n' fave this when it settles down
for to revive it when it goes quiet.
that may take awhile since this won't be easily forgotten,
but i'm not goin anywhere.

i'll
be
back.

=-)
 — jenakajoffer

oh , i'm not sure if this will change
a great deal in 10 years or so...

i like it the way it is now.
i love the feeling.

thanks for dropping by
again, jen.
; )
 — fractalcore

If I had one suggestion it would be to remove some of the adjectives near the end.  long-overdue could be exchanged for something shorter, like "old", drastic is awkward I feel...

9.9/10, and I rounded :)
 — technomancer

fractal in love?
 — unknown

words of a poet and they are so sweet
 — Liliana

thanks for reading, technomancer.

there's a certain rhythm i hear with this
and the words i employed seem to fall
at the right places.

i'd give myself a much lower rating for
failing to encapsulate everything i want
to express and feeling dumbfounded --
no...pleasantly dumb, i should say.

ok, let's round that off to "falling dumb".
: )
 — fractalcore

ey, unky.

i'll repeat myself:
"falling dumb".

thanks for reading.
: )
 — fractalcore

hi, Liliana.

really nice to hear from you;
it's been a while.

i'm just being me like i always am.
thanks for dropping by.

: )
 — fractalcore

nice to hear that you're
enjoying yourself, unky.

just take it easy, ok?
: )
 — fractalcore

This poem has excellent flow.
 — stackpop

         they've let go of a brilliant mind
            ;  someone like you, they can't find
         with all the raves and rants,
            ;  i searched, yet found none
         only lame excuses
            ;  and too much politics
            ;  these, too can't be fixed.

    
         how have you been?
         is the world getting so mean?
        
    
        to work with you again, i wish        
            ;  one thing's sure, you are missed.
  
        because in turbulent waters,
            ;  fractalcore matters.


           the transient is back  :)
  
 — enkantada

thanks for reading, stackpop.
: )
 — fractalcore

hi, enkantada.

that's very nice of you to say.
this poem was inspired by the
most beautiful thing that ever
happened to me. so i must say
i'm really doing good in spite of
life's meanness. i've never felt
this way before and now i know
this is how it is to "fall in love".
i know i sound like a 12-yr old
here now but i don't care.

sometimes i put myself in certain
situations that will lead to some
irrevocable quagmire like quitting
my job and many other things. my
mind/thoughts has/have always
been my constant companion thru
my highs and lows so i'm just being
me all the time really and it sure is
a great pleasure working for/with
some of the few great people with
great minds around.

thank you for the surprise visit and
see you again soon.

: )
 — fractalcore

A mixture of melancholy and joy finely written by a wise writer--nice work frac.
 — PaulS

thank you, PaulS.
: )
 — fractalcore

"      dreamy petals ride the wind
7
     ever so lightly for lack of shelter,
8
     not needing it like the child in you
9
    on a sun-day, or rain-day, perhaps
10


        i should let youth be and run
11
much faster, before i get another chance
12
         to drown, and learn to swim
13
            ;       for the first time
14
  towards the safety of not just knowing
15
         but really touching your skin
16
          of countless golden days --"

you've really improved your writing since the last time i visited, fractal. this is very well put together, especially the stanza that i quoted. congratulations.

smile!
midare
 — midare

I like it.
 — CNC92

midare, thanks so much.

i'd say this is the only time i'm anchored to my
emotions and wrote down the way i felt. truth is,
i can't explain what's happening to me. it just
feels so good really and i can't possibly write
something like this ever again.

it's good to know you like those stanzas; i like
the whole thing as it is and it does something
strange and magical to me everytime i read it
and i do it very often to live in that realm and
consciousness and become sane again.

: )
 — fractalcore

thanks, CNC92.

glad you like it.
: )
 — fractalcore

thank you, too, ashleydohert, for
taking the time to read and fave.
: )
 — fractalcore

it'll get easier and easier with time. don't worry about it too much. if you did it once, you can do it again.
 — midare

actually would you consider dropping line 21 altogether? thematically, it's sort of a cliche (i hate that word) departure from the rest of the poem-- you have heat, burn, crawl, black forest, fruits, mad beyond repair, task of toiling.........and frolic. maybe it doesn't have to be dropped altogether, but i feel as though the way that it's written right now is somehow detracting from what you were trying to say.

also magnificence flows much better into black forest than does frolic. at least it does to me when i read it out loud. just some thoughts.

smile!
midare
 — midare

hi, midare.

i really appreciate your giving this so much attention
and understand your reaction to |21. i can't seem to
let go of it as it serves as some sort of reinforcement
to the precedent, "magnificence", and a reprise to the
the idea of the 2nd strophe, suspending for a moment --
and, therefore, giving more emotional value and weight to --
the influx of the 5th strophe -- which is exactly how i read
it loud enough for me to hear.

the transition from the 4th to the 5th strophe is the most
difficult part for me and that's where the flow gets a little
bumpy as i struggle to say what i want to say. mike and
mong noticed the fluctuating drift, too, just like you did.
this is a very emotional thing and i can see myself here
as a big fool feeling so good for the first time, if you know
what i mean.

what you said about things getting easier for writers/poets
as they continue writing is something alien to me 'coz every
time i'm able to write anything at all is a new experience and
learning process. i always start from scratch, so to speak,
and it's difficult every single time. so i'm not worried about
anything really 'coz i just tend to be able to write when
something hits me hard enough and this one's the hardest
hit so far and maybe i literally won't be able to write ever
again.

i think the short stint with math, AUM, Gawd, word-plays, etc
paid off relatively well and i got a good part of myself laid
down in this awesome place. thanks to all of you poets for
inspiring me, to my friend who introduced me to PC, and
most of all to the most beautiful one who'll remain manifest
in my thoughts and actions forever.

thanks again for your critique, midare.
and, yes, i do smile here always.

: )
 — fractalcore

There are some parts that work - others not so much for me - I see no need for 'dreamy' or 'ever so lightly'. Lines 22-24 are evocative and memorable. Like the feeling in it and the majority of the writing feels light.
 — opal

Thank you for your geneous comment.  Am pressed for time @ moment but look forward to reading u as well.
LaG
 — LaGamba

hi, opal.

an honor to receive comments from you.
i understand your suggestions regarding "dreamy"
and "ever so lightly" but, if i removed them, the flow
and rhythm when i read this piece in my mind and out
loud are/will be compromised. i think the whole thing
will stay the way it is for good -- at least that's what i
can say and see for now.

||22-24 is where the height of my emotions start; i'm
glad you like it.

thanks again for gracing this page.
: )
 — fractalcore

LaGamba,

thank you for dropping by, man.
looking forward to reading more
of your works when i'm not pressed
with time, of course.

see you around.
: )
 — fractalcore

I really liked this poem.  It rings a sense of joy, yet also wistfullness, and i ended up reading it three times before commenting.
 — Psyfro

hi Psyfro,

thanks for reading and commenting
on this piece. i read it every now and
then to regain my sanity and keep me
alive.

i won't be around very often but i look
forward to reading [more of] your works.
welcome to PC.

: )
 — fractalcore

great work. i like it when you write this colorful. it works well with you.
 — listen

thank you so much for stopping by, listen.

it's actually the first time i ever wrote a
piece like this and i just hope i can write
something ever again.

it's good to know you're still around writing
and please know that you are missed and
i read your posts even if i can't/don't comment.
this is the stupidest me at this point in my life.

keep writing and inspiring others, ok?
: )
 — fractalcore

please keep writing, Fractalcore. you write with energy.
 — listen

noby noby boy
 — unknown

hi again, listen.

i'll still be around whether i have something
new to post or not.

you're one of the most contagious energies here.
: )
 — fractalcore

maybe moby, monkee unky boy.
: )
 — fractalcore

hi, brokenarrows.

wanna hear what you have to say.
thanks for faving.

: )
 — fractalcore

nostalgic. reminds me of summer. it seems that you are longing for someone to be yours. unrequited, perhaps?
 — unknown

hi, unknown.

yes, i really want to be with this lady all the time
and i think about her everyday as she is all there
is i want and need.

i don't wish to "own" her, though, like a possession
that one locks up within the walls of jealousy or any
kind of insecurity for that matter.

she's a free spirit -- like i am -- whose wings are
never clipped. i may find that too hard to handle at
times like i find it hard to handle myself but, hey,
saying "i am me" is just like saying "i am she".

you can do the meth, er math.

thanks so much for stopping by.
: )
 — fractalcore

read this a couple more times and i get the feeling that the drastic is something of an inside joke.
inside jokes are a good thing they are an intimacy between people a little memory that has nothing to do with love or sex or the serious side of anything, an inside joke is the best kind of joke for the insiders because it is as a cord attaching them and nothing save death itself can break it, and maybe not even that.

plus jokes are funny
 — chuckle_s

well, really, it's a joke i cracked on
myself, chuck. it's a sad sad joke that's
kept bugging me for years now.

it's something of an ironic malady in the
mind when one hemisphere of my brain
says i wanna do this and the other says
i wanna do that.

more of MY inside joke, that is, but i think
she prolly knows what i'm talking about
and i know whom/what i want really.

: )
 — fractalcore

i like L7 and 8.

fc, there's no need to run, i guess, when everything that matters is just there.  this place is nothing but like a whore...would just allow everybody to feel her.

Nah!  great piece anyway.
 — happymole

hi, happymole.

what a pleasant surprise from you.

i didn't intend "run" to only mean "flee" here; it cuts
both ways. on the one hand, it's like setting the child
in me wild and free running with or against the girl on
the hill, mountain or beach and the whole of nature,
and then noticing how lovely her sunburnt skin is --
second only to the person, of course; on the other, it's
like really fleeing from the punitive "you[th]", running
as fast as i can from it, hoping to be permanently
unaware of her so as to avoid gravitating towards her.

"perhaps" is both a part of ||10 & 11 and the 4th strophe
reinforces the idea conveyed in S3. that same idea is the
[under]current flowing more strongly as one gets nearer
the end of the piece so i guess i'd say there's neither
turning back on nor running away from such a beautiful
thing and putting it all in writing is the least i can do.

no, i don't think this does her or me justice at all. it's just
so amazing how so many people live a thousand lives
before they find what they need and want; how many
people find it in this very life, anyway?

i think the "wh*re" part is out of the question at this point.

thanks for reading and liking this.

: )
 — fractalcore

hmm, three 1's in a row?
that means 3 readers at almost
the same time...ooh, i'm really flattered, guys...
and where are the lovely comments?

: )
 — fractalcore

welcome to the one-agains fract -- a write of passage here at PC! ;)
 — AlchemiA

s'ok, Alc.

just needed to wave hello to them
ones end fore all.

free-kin nee-one-dare-tolls, hehe.
; )
 — fractalcore

well, it's a bumpee day...
: )
 — fractalcore

hmm...
: )
 — fractalcore

this is your best Fract -- Quantum entanglement theory has shown that depending on the observer, light is either a particle or a wave. It is a strange power that the observer has, is it not? How we see ourselves and others would have similar consequences, n'est-ce pas? -- Dr. Wayne Dyer put it rather Poetically - Change the way you look at things and the things you look at change -- a trick ... it's 'creativity' in action; the story is you, your Myth your Hopes and Wishes, your miseries turned to Gold by really 'seeing' it that way. Delusional at first, then the trick starts to work because the observer always changes what is observed, especially in Love.
 — AlchemiA

thanks again, Alc.

but i think i haven't bent the light here enough in the
right direction, don't you think? too much familiarity
with certain things perhaps and therefore neglecting
others equally necessary?

somethings wrong with my head, yeah.
: )
 — fractalcore

bump.

; )
 — fractalcore

been awhile since i last gave
this ample attention.

hmm...
: )
 — fractalcore

You shouldn't have bumped up all your poems. Real selfish.
 — unknown

yea, owch! ...got a bump on my head.
 — syrossoul

thanks for the reminder, dear unk.
: )
 — fractalcore

syro,

welcome to the club.
: )
 — fractalcore

needed to favorite this poem.
 — listen

very much like your poem--

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so much so that I had to fractalEYES my comment..
dat's nICE
 — JKWeb

beautiful poem

thank you for sharing

funes
 — unknown

hi, listen.

thanks for coming back.
glad this had an impact
on you somehow.

: )
 — fractalcore

thank you so much,
mr. JKWeb-ster sir.

always glad to have
you around.

; )
 — fractalcore

funes,

pleasure to have you
here as well.

thank you so much for
reading.

: )
 — fractalcore

Excavated from the archives---

still diggin' it.
 — JKWeb

thanks for bringing this up, JKWebster sir.
happy new year to you and your family.

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 — fractalcore

just stumbled on this one again. it's so beautiful i thought i'd bump it. thanks:) Les Coke.
 — unknown

Love your happy flip flops--what a joyous image!
L25--mad beyond repair--gem of a line.

A lovely, love love poem beautifully rendered.  
 — sybarite

...and holy comments frac-man!  Was a lotta scrollin' ta get to my turn!
 — sybarite

well, syb, people say
patience is a beer-twoo,
hehe.

thanks for dropping

bye.
; )
 — fractalcore

DAMN!! GOOD JOB!
 — psychofemale

WHY, THANK YOU!
; )
 — fractalcore

beautiful fractal thoughts :)
 — softyetharsh

thanks.
;)
 — fractalcore

this gave me tears i faved it
 — unknown

just would like to announce that i've finally removed |14 after more than 6yrs. hope the piece reads better now.

:)
 — fractalcore

So you say, and the best poem I have read in a long time.  
One more read.

Your thoughts are fractal until released- you're not dumb.
"Dreamy petals."  flip-flops.

You're shit is complex, but you're still a fool.  
For you is such a jackass maneuver.
 — percocet

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