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the ex-pat buzz in ra-bu hoteru

they made her sit
back to the glass, tits
pointed out, bridled
by a flesh kimono.
the light was feeble,
the incense unsettling;
every pair of eyes
spoke japanese fluently.

5 Feb 09

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the [settling and fluently] almost works, but it's, like, flu-ently, on the last two syllables. it's like tuning in a radio station, where you jump back and forth, and it turns the verse itself into two different announcers. nice experience.
 — geckodrome