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House of Cards
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her name and mine enveloped
 1
in the bliss of letters,
 2
the curly Q's, the dead end
 3
D's.
 4
 
 
white ghost limbs on the
 5
threshold of enclosure,
 6
and slow, so slow,
 7
the lies building
 8
 
 
rising up,  
 9
walling us in this
 10
house of cards-
 11
every screech every
 12
faint murmur threatens
 13
to let it all come
 14
crashing down.
 15
 
 
so we lie still,
 16
we do not breathe.
 17
 
 
waiting for a gentle
 18
breeze to unseal  
 19
that dream:
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FOREVER
 21

15 Feb 09

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title is the same as a movie about an 'is she or isn't she autistic' child which was really poorly done.  i'm sorry this interferes with my perspective.  i really hated that movie.

  
 — jenakajoffer

help me...what's a dead end D?  is it you?
=-)

i like the ending, the poem is kinda cheesy tho.
 — jenakajoffer

mmmm cheese.
 — DeformedLion

it's pretty good stuff, yes.
 — jenakajoffer

i mean the cheez.
wow linus, are you in love??????
 — jenakajoffer

very sensual if you read between the lines and have imagination, i read it back words first just to get ready for the forward read, harrah for me
 — goeszon

wow.
: )
 — fractalcore

me, love? no.

the Q and D was just me trying to be clever. Translates to QED.

but i do like the way things just seemed to come togethor with this poem, it seemed quite natural.

ps: marry me jen. i am yours. FOREVER. nah. maybe for a year or two.

umm, thanks for the comments guys.
 — DeformedLion

aw linus, i'm really flattered!




















but i am already marrying chuckles
(shhh, he doesn't know yet)
 — jenakajoffer

he chuckles when he fucks.

hee hee.
 — DeformedLion

removed an "and", yee-haw.
 — DeformedLion

happy anniversary linus ;)
 — jenakajoffer

this was a year ago...hmm, hey, seems like yesterday-ish...

and wow nothing important has happened. like totally.


hey jen. kisses. kiss. kiss.
 — DeformedLion

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