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Thought Train
opal

I sat silent
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in a Health and Safety
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training seminar
 3
watching the railway line
 4
beyond the window
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some five hundred yards off.
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Eight trains flew by.
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Number four became
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my train of thought.
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Without regard for health
 10
or safety, it carried me away.
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3 Apr 09

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your train of thought has a caboose that carries us all away with the poment here writ -- they say day-dreaming is a signal that you're crossing the tracks of the linear left brain onto the right brain where connections are timeless 'n now:here -- got my ticket to ride! How'd you do on the Health 'n Safety seminar after your 'all aboard' call?
 — AlchemiA

i usually doo my thinking on the number two
 — chuckle_s

I got through my kiss of life stuff ok AlchemiA but as you have picked up so astutely, my mind was elsewhere
 — opal

good play on words chuckly,
 — opal

dead on arrival
 — unknown

sounds like you've run out of steam you old puffer.
 — opal

Well, it's a pleasant little moment.  That's about all I can say about it.  
I'd like to be a longer moment, perhaps.
 — aurelius

just goes to show how boring health and safety class is.
ugh, i hated it in college.  this made me feel like a time
in my new high shcool, skipping class on the hill beside the tracks,
counting the cars with my brother,
smoking and sleeping until the bell rang.

cute poem.  and funny coincidence i used the phrase 'train of thought' just now in a comment i just made.  hehe.
 — jenakajoffer

hahaha!  Funny and cute poem.  Last verse is the best, I think.  
 — Isabelle5

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