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Tarsier (Oh, to see in the night!)
aforbing

Taking into consideration that
 1
a bat can fly blindly by
 2
radar alone, I figured that
 3
someday I might be able to navigate
 4
infatuation's winding wilderness.  Alas, the
 5
eyes of love are not nocturnal--
 6
razor sharp clarity by day, useless in the dark.
 7

Yes, it's an ACROSTIC, but I didn't want to bill it as one.  I think it's pretty good all on its own merit.  It just so happens to be in acrostic format.  :)

22 Apr 09

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best to employ the completely blind hands of lust for navigating the darkness then
 — chuckle_s

I learnt a new word with your ironic acrostic today -- the reading 'n misreading of human behaviour is often because we look with the daylight-eyes of reason instead of the dark 'n deep original mind of the heart -- the poet is one who brings a fresh focus to the everyday, fresh eyes to the mundane, here your tarsier eyes were big 'n shiny reflecting the moon, thus mooning us all with your darkly wit -- nicely done light poetry
 — AlchemiA

"reflecting the moon"

actually i don't think that's literally possible for these creatures?
 — chuckle_s

yes, a new wprd learned today for me too :)

lines 3 and 4 .. sublime thought..
 — Feminoid

wprd = word
 — Feminoid

Yeah... I tried to make it "deep" and yet, light.  I guess my arrow hit its mark--YAY!
 — aforbing

way to go Fletcher, i mean Archer
 — chuckle_s

i have a tarsier glued onto my backpack
: )
 — fractalcore

Excellent artistic form, excellent idea and execution.  I am surprised that you don't want this form to be one of the big points.  It's not easy to do well.  
 — unknown

ps - 'useless in the dark' is why God invented HANDS!  You know you're already blind, Aforb!  haha
 — Isabelle5

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