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wee particles
gnormal

we particles
 1
two are waves
 2

A human being is part of the whole, called by us "universe," a part limited in time and space. He experiences his thoughts and feeling as something separate from the rest -- a kind of optical delusion of his consciousness. This delusion is a kind of prison for us, restricting us to our personal decisions and to affection for a few persons nearest us. Our task must be to free ourselves from this prison by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature in its beauty. - Einstein

27 Apr 09

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Poetry serves many masters, not all beatific. Every age gets the poetry it deserves.   L. F.   - Our  nature in its beauty... Einstein
j,g, smiles... on a different line can't hold up to Einstein
 — goeszon

Quantum physics has shown that depending on the observer, light is either a particle or a wave. It is a strange power that the observer has, is it not? How we see ourselves and others would have similar consequences, n'est-ce pas? -- the whirl'd turned inside of you, a-round, a-bout, as whirls do, a sigh escaped as you passed, alas, from ecstasy into the crash -- the poet is one who brings a fresh focus to the everyday, fresh eyes to the mundane, with music in the ecstasy of broke-back words in how they fly away off the page in particles 'n waves, with lip-synchronicity and all the metasensory expansions 'n contractions, falling and getting up again to constantly risk absurdity -- well done!
 — AlchemiA

knowman making pudding
knowman chasing light
knowman gogo round
and round
digdigging up the night
seekseek little_chicken
seek_seekingtiny_eggsinflight_

we are all
as such and just
far flung dung
in cosmic dust
 — unknown

we are wee
and this
and that

: )
 — fractalcore

i'd eliminate 'are'.
 — hank

wee particles are waves, too

two waves are we particles

waves, too, are particles wee

gneiss...

: )
 — fractalcore

this reminds me of why I failed/dislike science.

one is told
one holds on

t osoomeone elseswordnot cosmoswort{l}{{P)oopsdsbutcleverturnsconstan
tin opals
ofplatformwitoutpigeoinlatinpijamas
 — unknown

i like this part-ickle pome. :)
 — syrossoul

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