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the recession (sitcom pilot episode)
bykguy2000

meet my friend
 1
boris the unemployed blackjack dealer
 2
he has a face like a horseshoe
 3
just look at those droopy eyelids
 4
he hasnt seen action in 9 days
 5
 
 
 
 
there was some snow
 6
it was snowing
 7
i cheated and i won
 8
 
 
 
 
he talks like that
 9
i eat glazed doughnuts from a pink box
 10
we sit at the table
 11
a wooden half circle
 12
coated with red felt and deerskin
 13
there he goes again
 14
doing coke off a meteor and shit
 15
 
 
 
 
its the simplest thing in the world
 16
to make a mother sad
 17
no
 18
dont tell her that
 19
please dont say that to anyone
 20
 
 
 
 
a vietnamese boy appears to boris' right
 21
looking up at him
 22
but the boy has no pupils
 23
i dont know if boris was fired
 24
he wrote this piano blues song called
 25
tell me when you kill somebody
 26
 
 
 
 
town small but expanding
 27
town small but expanding
 28
they made it sound so ominous
 29
do you work for the power company
 30
i am the power company
 31
tell meee when youuu kill sooomebodyyy
 32

15 May 09


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hehe, i read this when you first posted it.  really like the first stanza.  the poem's kind of all over, but i get that.  
sorry i didn't comment before on the mention of the vietnamese boy.
damn that made me laugh.  this is quite good if you're in the right frame of mind. it doesn't go well though, after reading something sweet.
i shall continue...
 — jenakajoffer

Aw I'm glad you like this, I love hanging out with Boris
 — bykguy2000

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