|Poem for a poet
Your verse falls upon my skin
trailing goosebumps in its wake;
The languid caress of syllables,
The resonance of rhyme, intoxicates
like drops of sweetest wine.
You weave stanzas into tapestries
stained with ethereal landscapes
to enthrall, choose each word
with a jeweler's eye, knowing
the glittering facets would seduce.
Yet I suspect, beyond the skein
of iridescent words, throb the lips
of a festering wound; your lyrical seduction,
but an anodyne to ease a jaded soul.
27 May 09
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great 3rd strophe.
i wonder if you could somehow
rewrite |5 or drop it altogether.
but that's just me, of course.
hmmm yeah...i think it will read better if i drop L5...thanks! :)
well, drop it already.
can't stand any more of its taste.
hmm okay consider this revision:
your verse falls
on skin, trailing
stanzas stain ethereal
landscapes - enthralled:
choosing words carefully
as setting gems.
yet beyond the skein
of iridescent verbs,
your wounds throb
like lips -- one kiss
for a jaded soul
now that reads a lot better.
when did you write the the old one?
fractalcore: when exactly? a lifetime ago :)
here you go, further revisions. i'm rusty at this so forgive the constant edits :)
verse falls on skin
ethereal landscapes: enthralled:
setting words as carefully
as glittering gems.
beyond the skein of
wounds throb, bloody edges
puckered like lips: a kiss
for jaded souls.
i like the 2nd version though
where your line breaks work
but you can post all of these
versions as variations ( see,
you've already started a trend
in PC, trashpoodle )