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knot
grneyeddevil

ponder
 1
fonder dreams have come to pass
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hills have rolled to mountains
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seas have boiled to looming gods
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as i once had faith in you
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once a towering buzz and howl
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a spectacle to behold
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endeared to fanatic retrospect
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but faltered
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dead
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at my feet
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my feat of unparalleled compromise
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unwise to bear the strain
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refrained to bite my tongue once more
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as it ripples
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dribbling on deaf ears
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and fears of souls and fears of saints
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cold
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dead to me
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statues of virtue  born of bravado
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of lies and trickery
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birthed to life by crooked lips
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i feel your pull
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yet
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refuse your grip
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your words mean naught to me
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this twisted knot of me
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beguiled anatomy
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4 Jun 09

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This is killer...I really like this one.  I especially like lines...Hell, I like the whole poem...~Excellent~
 — JKWeb

Impressive, compelling and powerful piece.  If it improves on 2nd and subsequent readings as it did for me, it really speaks.
 — gombola

thanks very much! i hadn't posted in soooo long that i just typed this up off the top of my head. i'm very glad it came across to you both. cheers!

GeD
 — unknown

Revisited this one...still killer :-)
 — JKWeb

thanks again jk! anyone else have feedback?
 — grneyeddevil

welcome back.

might've been gone on june 4th
but good to see this and you now.

: )
 — fractalcore

rather grandiose?
 — unknown

um yeah unk, poetry can be a bit grandiose sometimes. kinda the point y'know.

hey fractal, thanks for reading. i've been doing the gypsy thing and traveling around a lot. i come and read some things when i have a minute. thanks for reading!
 — grneyeddevil

Thanks again to the unks. I find that a lot of the time free association brings out the best in a poet. At least as far as I'm concerned.
 — grneyeddevil

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