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Apocalypse Weather
cubbzor

I was crossing the street about midday
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when I noticed I was in step with another man.
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I glanced to my right and he glanced back.
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We cracked awkward, blegh smiles
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and nodded.
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We then waited at the next corner,
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both of us aimed at the opposite side.
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I shuffled my scuffed shoes
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and he looked up at slate sky.
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"This is apocalypse weather," he said.
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"Why's that?"
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"Just look at this place," he continued on, exhaling.
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"We haven't seen the sun for days, and let's face it. Nobody here would expect the four horsemen to be galloping through. It would be the perfect, perfect freak accident, QED".
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I smiled to myself.
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"I'm sorry to disappoint," I chuckled
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"I'm the first horseman, the other three slept in today".
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"Is that so?" He said.
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"Well in that case, I guess I'll be on my way".
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"Have a great apocalypse."
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22 Jun 09

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nice

possible typo: apocalipso???

swing yer partner doh see doh

??????

poet who goes by the name bi-stander
 — unknown

I'm a bit confused by what you said, but that you
 — cubbzor

I like your poem...interesting idea...but I was wondering about QED...is that latin for quad erat demonstrandum?

just wondering...
 — JKWeb

yeah it is, like what you have to put in geometric proofs to say you summed everything up
 — cubbzor

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