|A Didactic Concrete
Fighters are never Appeasers never are fighters
Fight the Fear the fight
Death before Dishonor before death
Face their Turn their face
Never say Always say never
Country before Self before country
Share your Love your share
Love people not Things not people love
Only love people Never love things
Love people only Love things never
People only love Things never love
30 Jun 09
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I was experimenting with an acrostic and came up with this. I couldn't find what it would fall under so I combined Didactic and Concrete poems and came up with the title. Try reading it vertically as well as horizontally. Hope you guys like it. Redlander
This is incredible. No criticisms. I am simply blown away. I love the language, the format, the rhythm, everything. It makes me hyper aware about the significance of terms like "fighters" and "dishonor". Our culture is dissected by this poem. Keep experimenting.
Wow, you can read it so many different ways. That's what I love about it. It is, in a sense, multi-dimensional.
nice poem :) will read this a few times more and come back with something...
not multi-dimensional. multi-angled.
interesting to look at. annoying to read.
What a pleasant surprise! I was just playing around with words and positioning and never expected to get such positive comments! SodaKid you're too kind. syrossoul always a pithy comment thanks. DeformedLion, it is multidimentional read it from behind, under, as well as above and the inside out! Just kidding, I'm glad I got any response since that shows some type creativity as opposed to just moving on to another poem without any reaction. Again thank you guys.
A shameless self bounce for my second poem.
I'm not sure what to say, at first I hated it, was about o put it in the " too artsy for it's own good" folder, but , but, I repeat, but I do like it, it's creative, but it still hod merrit.
I don't like the use of Appeasers ( is that really a word) also the way the first line is a bit off kilter from the rest I think greatly detracts from the entire poem.
lines 17-19 just seem to repeat what line 15 already said, and said quit well too.
I might be missing something there. This will take some serious rereading.
First of all thank you Solstice for taking the time to read my piece, secondly "appeasers" is a word the plural of appeaser, thirdly I think I fixed the lines so they're not too off kilter now, and lines 15-19 were added on after the poem was submitted and I was just experimenting with some additional words and phrases I was trying to line up vertically as well as horizontally. Any way thanks for the read and comments and what is "hod merrit"?
Sorry I ent to say Hold Merrit, which upon further reading also doesn't makealot of sense. So um what I should of just said is upon rereadig it a few times it grew on me : )
Thank you Solstice I'm glad it grew on you & fractalcore for calling it "gneiss" you're too kind. And I'm going to give myself another shameless plug with another oldie but, I hope, goodie.