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mirrors in a man
fractalcore

Managed to drop them --
 1
Juggled the pieces like helms
 2
Jiggle with pishes.
 3




here's my pencil rendition of MJJ's eyes [circa 1992]
@ http://i33.tinypic.com/8zob52.jpg


written july 12, 2009
now being migrated over here with everything else



thanks, Isabelle5, syrossoul, justin (was it you who mentioned MalcolmX in your poem?), & Ebony (hope this attempt of mine at acrostics will meet your approval).

above all, my endless thanks to

Michael Joseph Jackson
(August 29, 1958 – June 25, 2009)

for his music and everything else he lived for.

you'll forever be remembered and missed.


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    /   \
fractalcore
     : )


p.s.
this apparently failed the Ebony acrostics test but i still owe her (i believe you're a she) the inspiration.

29 Jul 09

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i know you're not a pisces
and you're 23 years over 27;
otherwise, this post would've been


Managed to drop them --
Juggled the pisces like helm
Jiggles with fishes.


love you, man.
; )
— fractalcore           [!]

I'm not sure I understand the poem itself. What is or are pishes? MJJ are his initials alright but  an acrostic is essentially an acronym. So I'll hold off on this one
— Ebony           [!]

yeah, i know, hehe.
hence my pseudo-acrostic
reference in my cheeky invite
on your poem.

i think pishes is the plural form
of pish; i'm just not sure it exists
but there it is.

; )
— fractalcore           [!]

plus this has a 5-7-5 count so...

: )
— fractalcore           [!]

So is it supposed to be written like in your comment pisces and fishes, in a Haiku form?
— Ebony           [!]

well, put it that way,
but i doubt this would even
pass for a haiku.

; )
— fractalcore           [!]

What the fu?
— unknown         &nbs p;[!]

yea, works for me.  :)
— syrossoul         &n bsp;[!]

what thu, unk?

; )
— fractalcore           [!]

thanks, syrossoul.
: )
— fractalcore           [!]

italicize
— unknown         &nbs p;[!]

embolden!
; )
— fractalcore           [!]

whoops
: )
— fractalcore           [!]


: )
— fractalcore           [!]
 — fractalcore

i'll just paste my 10 in here..
 — syrossoul

i feel sticky already, syro.

but thanks a lot.
; )
 — fractalcore

i feel sticky already, syro.

but thhanks a lot.
; )
 — fractalcore

bumpeetee day, everee-one.
; )
 — fractalcore

i saw MJJ's 'this is it' film last night
and it was amazing -- he is a beautiful
person.

i did a pencil rendition of his 'eyes'
sometime in 1992 or thereabouts.

http://i38.tinypic.co m/23ma3pe.jpg

i know no tribute will be enough but
there it is.

: )
 — fractalcore

oops, lemme change that to
http://i33.tinypic.com /8zob52.jpg

: )
 — fractalcore

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