poetry critical

online poetry workshop



improvisational me
DeformedLion

my new tv makes jazz,
 1
more into math than feeling,
 2
kalei- and cally, your
 3
and you, those M-sounds
 4
from the f hole mouth
 5
of a drill-sergeant,
 6
and yet, in all thing, s
 7
great
 8
and
 9
small
 10
you like double-jointed apotheosi'
 11
gh- and ghee, you flounder
 12
like ice and melt like tubers
 13
caught by the hearty.
 14
 
 
break, break, dance, dance
 15
sound the horn the horn is
 16
horns,
 17
like little worms crawling from
 18
crawling in your skin,
 19
 
 
you,
 20
 
 
mitochondrial and hazardous,
 21
 
 
touch keys
 22
 
 
and
 23
recite your poetry to the
 24
fishbowl witch, stirring
 25
spoon, first to shrug into
 26
the Oponn, the luck;
 27
the shrewder shredder kissing
 28
virgins for all the screens
 29
to see,
 30
 
 
 
 
the heart butt,
 31
is farting, is
 32
idolized buy
 33
the chosen one,
 34
his prophecy is discounted
 35
by gore-eee rhododendron
 36
rhetoric, remedial, math,
 37
math, met, math, mean, and
 38
scotch burnt tongue
 39
 
 
your FATher your HEr
 40
like prayer for the blinding,
 41
 
 
touch and go!
 42
touch and go! do
 43
another touchdown,
 44
 
 
speaksoftly'causetheprince
 45
isinthehalw ays.
 46
 
 
the prince is reciting poetry
 47
like words which sound like
 48
tears, these words like
 49
ash, torn between two bodies;
 50
the first, and the beginning...
 51
 
 
the. and the. the jazz, it is
 52
lighting the street in numb
 53
ers and error laden beggars
 54
scream but are not heard over
 55
the wail of the ‘phone--
 56
 
 
she is singing,
 57
singing,
 58
singing.
 59

5 Aug 09

Rated 10 (10) by 1 users.
Active (1): 10, 10
Inactive (2): 10

(define the words in this poem)
(365 more poems by this author)

(1 user considers this poem a favorite)



Add A Comment:
Enter the following text to post as unknown: captcha

Comments:

close the italics please
 — noodleman


 — unknown

hmm...

: )
 — fractalcore

its ok, fract, i understand.
 — DeformedLion

You have a very unique voice and it shines through in your words.  Very complex but cool.
 — Treadwell

0.357s