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sepia love
Aziel

on a cloudy day--
 1
orange-tinted; warm;
 2
breathy, like hushed giggles;
 3
murmurs of sweet kisses
 4
shudder down my spine
 5
and i shoot without thinking
 6
 
 
this revolutionary sensation
 7
tickles across my palm,
 8
igniting sparks in my memory
 9
creating lustful fires
 10
that burn into me
 11
with searing pain
 12
 
 
i didn't realize then
 13
how rapid and powerful
 14
the fever of change could be.
 15
this sepia love clouds my day,
 16
and this twirling undertow
 17
envelops my development
 18
 
 
fleeting thoughts
 19
dare to remind me
 20
i am no longer
 21
under that blissful June sun,
 22
though i find myself
 23
in an eternal summer
 24

14 Aug 09

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sepia love on a cloudy day--  1
orange-tinted; warm;  2
breathy, like hushed giggles;  3
murmurs of sweet kisses  4
shudder down my spine  5
and i shoot without thinking

this revolutionary sensation  7
tickles across my palm,  8
igniting sparks in my memory  9
creating lustful fires  10
searing pain pleasant  12

fleeting thoughts  19
dare to remind me  20
i am no longer  21
under that blissful June sun,  22
though i find myself  23
in an eternal summer

THIS IS WHAT I WOULD DO WITH YOUR POEM. i AM AN AMATEUR AND THIS SHOULD BE TAKEN LIGHTLY
 — peoplescareT

The actual third stanza is there for a reason.  Thank you for the sarcasm, though, it was delicious. :3
 — Aziel

OK WELL AT LEAST CONSIDER ALTERING "ENVELOPS MY DEVELOPMENT..."
 — peoplescareT

I LIKE YOU!!
*runs away*
 — peoplescareT

This is old as hell and won some kind of award or some shit, I dunno, i like "envelops my development".

And thanks. :3
 — Aziel

one of the better poems i have read on here today. i would lose the second reference to 'sepia' though. you pick which one though.
 — raskolniikov

ignore raskcuntikov.
best way.
 — unknown

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