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Moonfeathers
justagirlx3

for anake because you asked so vair nicely :)

Moonfeathers fall
 1
wait, no
 2
they fly
 3
to me with smiles
 4
aglow
 5
 
 
swirling my hair
 6
tickling my ear
 7
they whisper rhymes
 8
of mine
 9
 
 
I smile now
 10
and giggle to think
 11
the moon could know me
 12
so well
 13
 
 
moonfeathers fall
 14
wait, no
 15
they find me
 16
with purpose in each design
 17
 
 
They flock to me
 18
these feathers shy and
 19
dripping with lunar skies
 20
quietly
 21
softly
 22
they're falling
 23
wait, no
 24
they fly
 25

21 Sep 09

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    Beauty is a manifestation of secret natural laws, which otherwise would have been hidden from us forever.  Johann Wolfgang von Goethe.... I believe he wrote that for this day, never may it be that you should hide your self from us... Poet
j.g. smiles
 — goeszon

nice poem-
my only small suggestion(s) would be to put a comma between 'wait no' on lines 2, 15 and 24...I feel those lines begging for a pause..
also, you may want to put a space between 'feathers' and 'shy' in line 19..
otherwise, me likes
 — JKWeb

It's lovely.
 — Ananke

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