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Deformed:opm
DeformedLion

that's the way it came out,
 1
i was typing in my username,
 2
and feeling empty.
 3
 
 
there is coffee breathing loud beside me,
 4
and my throat is dry, i can't
 5
look at the carpet without seeing swirls
 6
of light, drifting patterns,
 7
granules staining vision,
 8
 
 
won't sleep, cannot dream without
 9
seeing myself caught in my life,
 10
 
 
stuck in the soft furs of what
 11
i know, and thinking that they
 12
are dumb, rooted, routined.
 13
 
 
that i am annealed in the fires
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of creation is a crock,
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i am mundane, i am air
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and flesh and despair.
 17
 
 
i can't stroke my pliant tool
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without being somewhat dissatisfied
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with its ever profound product
 20
of replication drying like cement
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over my stomach.
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cum see the fool! cum watch
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him live like ant, hunt like
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donkey for words, chase
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windmills through horizons of
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ash. crash out on couch
 27
and sleep,
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dream a little 'bout sex,
 29
a bit about doing what has already
 30
been done, think dirt,
 31
enliven the grass with
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sticky blood,
 33
 
 
call my body art as i
 34
thrash it with my nothingness.
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19 Oct 09

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gneiss.

i bet there are times when the pliant
thing is as stiff as a set of pliers.

yore broody art ease messing width
yore head, yes, that head, and my-inn.

; )
 — fractalcore

btw, |29 is a bit unnecessary and should go.
the line next to it then should read something
like 'and dream a bit about what has already'.
what do you think?

: )
 — fractalcore

this is a yonwondering thought, i think
seems to about self

live like ant?
hunt like a donkey?

i am curious to understand this. maybe you dont know
yourself?

well i do like this crazy stitching of letters.
 — Liliana

excepto
the title sorry there ant man, no go onthe title
can you come up with something better?
ah ha i see now

deformed lion!
 — Liliana

I like your poem-
though I can't tell you exactly why...
interesting to see
into your mind
for a short time...
nice write
 — JKWeb

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