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There must be 50 reasons for this disorder (revised)
BxPR

I’m sorry if this poem will cause you pain.
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But it’s important so I hope you won’t refain.
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Having P.T.S.D. doesn’t mean you are insane.
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There must be, fifty reasons for this disorder.
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Believe me it’s not my purpose to upset.
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And what I say I say with so much true regret.
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So consider that I’m trying to connect.
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There must be, fifty reasons for this disorder.
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Was it Iran Stan?
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Or perhaps Afghanistan?
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Maybe Iraq Jack.
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Just listen to me.
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Got P.T.S.D. Lee,
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Was the reason Nam, Tom?
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Don’t try to avoid Roy
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It ain't gotta be.
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Done the twelve steps Les?
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Don’t mean to digress Bes.
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Get all the facts Max.
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Pod Two Says Dee.
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Strive for success Wes.
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Show the world you’ve passed the test.
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Don’t you chu hoy boy.
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Just you wait and see.
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My clinitian told me that group would help me out.
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On a path to wellness that it would be the route.
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I said that I believed, and I always think about, the
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fifty reasons for this disorder.
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I’ve learned that it's both the journey and the goal.
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And it’s not because we are growing old.
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It’s the truth, that now is being told.
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There must be, fifty reasons for this disorder.
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Desert Storm Norm?
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Was it Korea Lea?
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World War Two Lou?
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It's the P.T.S.D.
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Having much pain Jane?
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Did the V.A. deny your claim?
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It's time to appeal Neal.
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Do it for me.
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Trouble with trust Rus?
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Death of a pal Hal?
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It’s all right to cry Sal.
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Just listen to me.
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Holding it in Tim?
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Release it for all for your kin.
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Remember it’s not a sin.
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You hold the key.
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.....
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There must be, fifty reasons for this disorder.
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                This is a project for a writing group, it goes to the tune of "Fifty Ways to Leave your Lover" by Paul Simon
     "chu hoy" was a program in Vietnam where enemy combatants could surrender without fear or danger, the word basically means "surrender"

26 Oct 09

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funny and sad.
 — Anachocolata

Thank you Anachocolata very much appreciated
 — BxPR

on a quick read, I like the voice and tone of this write.
 — repeatme

Hey  repeatme thanks and I hope you like it if you read again.
 — BxPR

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