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by impulse: the 100th side of the unifaceted polymath love currency

eyed seat --
win'em tie-herd
so hallowed
spake blah'd
thee heart[h]
deep ashen
smoke --
same one
dusk eyes
oh veer
me, burn
too yours
too long
aisle 'waits
ribbed urn:
to my Nth
mmm'eyes ole:
twice me-


'eye Om here, hear me, weaving
fractal dreams
with ewe'

a variation to 'bye,imp;else'
still written for my bestest
dearest 'knees, et cetera',
this time in the

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30 Oct 09

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i struggled :-(
 — raskolniikov

an i full
an ere' full
a land fill
it all counts
 — unknown

hi codetalker
 — Liliana

oh fract, hehe.  you know i always try.
 — jenakajoffer

it took sum mind-bending
eye strains but t'was fun 2 read

    /   \      /
_/      \/\/
 — JKWeb

hi there, folks.

rask, always an honor to have you
give my posts a read.

unk, sometimes i lose count, two,
but it's just normal, i think. thank
you for your visit.

Liliana, eye'em'ma 'talk-decoder' --
if that makes any difference. thank
you endlessly.

jen, you know i always hold your
work with so much value.

JKWebster sir, that is a really nice 'logo',
pretty much akin to a mind-bended set
of legos. thank you always for reading.

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     : )
 — fractalcore

this is so good
it hurts my head
 — unknown

i'm happy and sorry for you, unk.

thanks so much for your precious time.
; )
 — fractalcore


: )
 — fractalcore

frackywack- do you hackysack?

Tis a good pooh-em.
 — mandolyn

doo aye watt?

this is my 100th post,
buy duh weigh.

: )
 — fractalcore

ewe wen a free trip 2 CHINA!
 — mandolyn

we'll eye gut two sea
duh boo-duh bare-id
inn duh grrr-ate wool?

: )
 — fractalcore

you's git two sea da
or ee ents en da grape wol.
and eet man duh wren
chik-in ! !
 — mandolyn

eat duh man dare
inn duh kitchen inn
voodoo soup?

; )
 — fractalcore

eet oop sue por china dew?
 — mandolyn

Usually I thoroughly enjoy how you toy with language. But in this case I was confused for most of it and it was a little unsettling to read sounds that I couldn't pronounce in my head.
 — ishtarboy300

china dew ease ah soup-err
dupe-err delight lie-ick ah
china rubber doll pirouetting
on chinaware.

were ewe ones dare?
: )
 — fractalcore

gotta get these kids to step out of their pod-box and into some creative music -- give them new sounds, and maybe give them a sense of poet-identity too -- where they understand that it's up to them to find the poem and poet, not have the poetry boat turned into a tea-cup so they can sip.
 — bmikebauer

hi, ishtarboy300.

sorry about that. i wrote this as a variation to
this post: http://poetrycritic al.net/read/58938/

thank you for giving this one a shot and for
reading other stuff i have.

: )
 — fractalcore

ey mike,

very nice of you to stop by.
am surpised, hehe.

well, you know i'm just a kid myself stuck
@ 12 for the longest time and, incidentally,
still haven't liked the situation where i put on
some 'mood music' in order to write. i find it
distracting more often than not.

might just be the conflict between the real mood
i have and the ambient noise or something.

how does it work for you?
: )
 — fractalcore

; )
 — fractalcore

quantoom boompfh.
; )
 — fractalcore