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ones hop on a point in a magnetic sphere
fractalcore

winds drop low
 1
to rock-bottom blew's
 2
end you's
 3
are won-ended
 4
 
 
segments
 5
off a light ton-knell --
 6
 
 
nil eases
 7
d'creases strait
 8
to the core-related
 9
arty-factual lies
 10
with-inn
 11
 
 
duh truth off
 12
duh tooth dot
 13
false in-two places
 14
buy virtue of
 15
shell-fish-nets
 16
cloned n' clowned
 17
 
 
clown-den-cloned
 18
stereo-tip-ick-ell
 19
pea sin quo-why-it
 20
 
 
albeit beating
 21
the walls of yore
 22
sunny-tea
 23
with foe-ton sticks
 24
 
 
till hue brake
 25
with boo-duh laughed-err
 26
@yore.boo denature.
 27




written 09/11/13 [2009, november 13th];
a good odd number sequence and it's a friday.


patterns, coincidences, possibilities, and whatnot.


...namaskar...



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fractalcore
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incidentally:

an excerpt from my YM conversation with my MUSE
[note: ellipses are representative of portions omitted on purpose]

...
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:43:10 PM): and i used to draw almost everyday till i was about 12
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:43:21 PM): when my passion shifted
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:43:24 PM):
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:43:38 PM): my hands are prolly rusty now
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:44:11 PM): i would like to draw you when we're face to face
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:44:25 PM): ok i can draw you as well
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:44:29 PM): wow
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:44:39 PM): that's fantastic
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:44:42 PM): we will 'oil' our hands and draw
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:44:49 PM): hmm, yes
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:45:06 PM): but i would require you to be still
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:45:12 PM): i bet we would make nice drawings
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:45:18 PM): surely
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:45:26 PM): i'd stay still for you to draw
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:45:31 PM): and maybe i'd be drawing again everyday
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:45:49 PM): i'll draw you from different angles
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:45:55 PM):
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:46:01 PM): and i'll make songs for and about you
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:46:10 PM): lovely
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:46:13 PM): i'll write morepoetry about you and i
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:46:30 PM): i'll love life more because of you
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:47:17 PM): i would draw you and write about us and photograph you in certain moods and places from time to time
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:47:37 PM): and i would love you and make you happy
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:47:47 PM): maybee i'd have my own cam by then so i could photograph you too
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:48:01 PM): yes
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:48:09 PM): i know how it is to have a camera to shoot beautiful things
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:48:10 PM): but if not, you can use mine whenever you like
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:48:18 PM): oh, thank you
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:48:26 PM): to photograph any idea that you want
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:48:29 PM): yw
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:48:55 PM): how do you like my new poem? ...
...
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:50:19 PM): i liked reading the poem
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:50:32 PM): but i don't really really grasp the ideas
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:50:45 PM): oh, sorry about that
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:50:48 PM): like which ideas?
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:51:00 PM): like what you were thinking of when writing
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:51:21 PM): sunny-tea with foe-ton sticks
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:51:23 PM):
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:51:32 PM): you like that?
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:51:37 PM): yep
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:51:46 PM): and this
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:51:47 PM): winds drop low to rock-bottom blew's
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:52:13 PM): ids nice the poem
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:52:25 PM): playful and delicious
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:52:31 PM): like yourself
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:52:57 PM): well it's like saying 'come, let's go to the core of my blues'
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:53:10 PM): 'i'll show you stuff about me'
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:53:33 PM): 'right at the bottom/heart of my soul'
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:53:41 PM): very nice
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:53:58 PM): segments are naturally 2-ended
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:54:32 PM): we are segments
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:54:36 PM): but blue's and you's [or me's or hues] owe their being to light
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:54:44 PM): yes
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:54:48 PM): and we are born of light
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:55:12 PM): and lightrays in this case have only one segment which is the source
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:55:31 PM): and they radiate towards infinity
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:55:41 PM): yep
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:55:58 PM): at the core seems to live 'nil'
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:56:14 PM): or 'nothingness'
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:56:55 PM): and it straightens out the creases, the folds, the bad
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:57:28 PM): which are all core-related or correlated and the same
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:57:42 PM): it's an old truth, an artifact
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:57:54 PM): uhuh
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:57:58 PM): that lies within us all
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:58:18 PM): it's the truth of the tooth that falls into places
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:58:32 PM): in 2 [or two] places or more
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:59:16 PM): cause truth is like a tooth that sinks deep and is multifaceted
myGIRL (11/14/2009 6:59:28 PM): nice
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 6:59:42 PM): and love or the act of falling is multifaceted -- it comes/happens in so many ways
myGIRL (11/14/2009 7:00:09 PM): in all the ways
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:00:36 PM): and Life /Love is selfish in the sense that It loves itself so much
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:00:50 PM): just like in cases when soulmates find each other
myGIRL (11/14/2009 7:01:06 PM): ya
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:01:21 PM): they are meant to love each other for all time
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:01:49 PM): and this Life/Love reality is simply cloned in soulmates
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:01:56 PM): or in all beings
myGIRL (11/14/2009 7:02:02 PM): so why sometimes some people fall in love with whom they shouldn't have?
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:02:10 PM): and other things
myGIRL (11/14/2009 7:02:27 PM): seems like an annomaly
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:02:28 PM): we are all biologically compatible
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:02:40 PM): and emotinally too
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:02:51 PM): emotionally
myGIRL (11/14/2009 7:02:56 PM): and then?
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:03:09 PM): but there's only one bestest friend/partner for a specific person
myGIRL (11/14/2009 7:03:18 PM):
myGIRL (11/14/2009 7:03:32 PM): so we look for it
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:03:38 PM): i've only known that these past few years/months
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:03:54 PM): it's our subconscious yearning
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:04:04 PM): a natural tendency that motivates us
myGIRL (11/14/2009 7:04:05 PM): yes
myGIRL (11/14/2009 7:04:15 PM): for we are life and love
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:04:24 PM): yes
myGIRL (11/14/2009 7:04:29 PM): they drive us, fuel us
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:04:52 PM): it's like a clown or mime that entertains us
myGIRL (11/14/2009 7:05:00 PM):
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:05:44 PM): but underneath where love is realized -- for soulmates -- it's just the stereotypical peace and quiet that searches for itself and finds it
myGIRL (11/14/2009 7:05:55 PM): so then.. hmm.. ...
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:07:47 PM): though this 'peace and quiet' makes so much noise by beating the walls of our sanity with mindwaves or photos or frequencies of the same amplitude
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:08:03 PM): or amplitueds of the same frequencies
myGIRL (11/14/2009 7:08:11 PM): aha
myGIRL (11/14/2009 7:08:26 PM): we are basically the same
fractalcore : ) (11/14/2009 7:08:37 PM): soulmates then are just happy in their 'buddha-nature'
...
myGIRL (11/14/2009 7:10:05 PM):
myGIRL (11/14/2009 7:10:17 PM): yes my love
myGIRL (11/14/2009 7:10:23 PM): soulmates are happy
...

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cOOl POEm-
though sometimes when I read your work-
I feel that your words shouldn't hide behind the veil that is fract speak--
but I find myself torn in that I know that's your unique style and I do like that
aspect of your writes but am sometimes frustrated when I'm unable to decipher your unique language...eether way, an enjoy-able rEEd...
— JKWeb           [!]

hi, JKWebster sir.

thank you so much for giving my post
your precious time. i've added a rather
heftry footnote as another sneak peek into
my privacy aside from what my poems allow.
it's one among many ways of reading it and i
hope it will be of great help.

thanks again.

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— fractalcore             [!]

hey FracT- luv the dialogue with myGirl -- sweet inebriations -- Soul mates are like matter and anti-matter which can go out with a bang making much light from the egOpine fight they have some nights -- nevertheless, they make love through the mess and wait for the time they'd hoped for all along, not with a bang but a whimper, not so damned wrong or right but fuzzy and fractal as with first light on the edge of infinite night...
— AlchemiA         [!]
 — fractalcore

Fractal, hiya

you have got it.
 — Liliana

ey, thanks so much for the comments, guys.
sorry, i just got too busy to get back to you
right away, but i really appreciate your giving
this your precious attention.

what's up with all these suspended comments?
: )
 — fractalcore

They weren't comments, it was all one of those drug bots that reproduces over and over.  I tried to catch them all and I would have written to tell you but you have no e-mail for me.

imc
 — Isabelle5

oh ok. so it's still those scripts they drop behind.

thanks so much for taking care of it, Isabelle5.
had to repost this piece because some moderator
froze it after an unk left one of those tags/scripts
here.

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 — fractalcore

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eye add-mire yore relentless effort.

yore lie-ick an intern-all combust-chin end-gene.
: )
 — fractalcore

eye act-choo-wally mint
eat-err-nil end-gene.

: )
 — fractalcore

eat-err-nil combust-chin end-gene.

gee, eat never ends.
: )
 — fractalcore

as always fractal, you make me think as i read, and put some effort into it.
 — jharrison

it shouldn't be so hard for a person like you, 'J'.
the brain works way better than a computer.

thanks for our precious visit.
i quite have missed you, you know, hehe.
: )
 — fractalcore

*your* precious visit,
i should say.

hey,
'J'!

: )
 — fractalcore

yeah, i get the point, dude.

you're a drugged queen.
so doped to meet ewe.

thanks for the revisit.
: )
 — fractalcore

and, btw, that kind of poetry is gooed.

please leave it open, mods.
seriously.

that's a personal request from me.
thanks.

: )
 — fractalcore

ooh. lovely treat. thanks!!
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