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anatomy of a smile

for brenna

     her hair:
curly locks spill with irish browns
carrying coiled glimmers of light
over a mosaic of toasted freckles.
     her eyes:
blue and green mandalas
copulate to weave the iris of her eyes
and seduce me with sacred geometry.
     her smile:
a dimple surrenders beneath delicate lips
that reach with youthful ambition
to color her face with a smile.
she is beautiful.

27 Nov 09

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lovely!! thank you. Les Cloke
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thanks for the read/compliment
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ah yes you're very welcome!! Les
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nice one-
it's difficult to write this type of poem
without seeming cheesy-
but you've managed this very well..
 — JKWeb

much obliged JK
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I agree with JK, you did it by overcoming cheesyness. It's quite elegant as well as simple, and I imagine it brought brenna a smile.
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thanks for the read. this type of poem always runs the risk of cheesyness and ive definitely fallen for that trap before
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nice write
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sweet. i especially like lines 5&6
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