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DIAbolic man.ewe.veerings
fractalcore

eyes, id: jest
 1
met.a.furry.cult roots
 2
bee warmed
 3
bee.fur
 4
dee jury
 5
due.lei sighns
 6
worth a trillion
 7
petals that do tell --
 8
 
 
the contract:
 9
of-thee contact,
 10
cuffs me, glues,
 11
me to the edge --
 12
 
 
seat as hot
 13
as my eyes yearning
 14
for realities bee.yawned
 15
the eye.see mask you wear
 16
to conceal the glare,
 17
 
 
the table turning,
 18
shrinking, changing
 19
phases and hues
 20
so our cherub hands
 21
could clasp, around
 22
the candle that lights
 23
 
 
     the world we built around it,
 24
     getting us farther
 25
     than tomorrow
 26
     could ever go --
 27
 
 
clouds float light
 28
after a night of a fright
 29
that's never been.
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for my dearest nisetru,
through all the highs and lows.

H KNUD XNT with my whole being.
---{@


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11 Dec 09

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the image of a Mystic candle, enamoring Fire, is so light --
shimmering tenuously, lurching shadows and g-listening; while all around
storms are gathering ...
you're fRactal-language continues to dis-solve our word-expectations and break our lugubriations so we can drink-drunk from your Poem -- the tables-r-turning, the whirl'd is burning and we're on a road that the past-fore-told while on a merry-go-round
love-goes to where no-body-knows 'cept lovers-in-a-dangerous climb

;)
 — AlchemiA

Hmmm. My head hurts.
 — mandolyn

i love this love poem very much
 — nisetru

well, it's for you, nisetru.
and i love you so much.
---{@

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 — fractalcore

pretty impressive on my mind. the last stanza locks it into brightness and connects the light bulbs together to make a wreath.
 — bmikebauer

AlchemiA dear sir,

you nailed it; very apt observations.
thanks always for reading.

: )
 — fractalcore

mandolyn,

i guess it's always my fault, but then
i'd like to believe that there's no
'pointing fingers' in love.

sorry for making it difficult for you;
this is just the hopeless romantic me
having a fit.

thank you so much for putting up with
me.

; )
 — fractalcore

mike,

that last stanza is my own idea of redemption.
actually, it really is the idea behind it all...
hence, the title and the body.

is it too soon a closing, though?

thanks always for that critical mind-eye.

: )
 — fractalcore

no, it came on abrupt, yes, but the wording was so close-grained that it made the rest of the poem slow down for it. it was like that.
 — bmikebauer

in a sense, the last couplet, like this, is outside the poem, like a motto, anyway, and, for me, is the truth of the poem -- like the song in a raga, which is arrived at only when the music is folded and shaped enough to be a stage for it.
 — bmikebauer

thanks, mike.

i was sort of hoping to achieve just that -- there was nothing more
i could say beyond |27 except for that 'motto'. as i mentioned in
your 'stroked' thread, the title paralyzed me for 3-4 days and the
body of the poem itself proved to be of the same ilk.

your opinion is very valuable.

: )
 — fractalcore

Date In Asia?
 — unknown

eYe leYeKe Your POEm-
again, Your unique stYle
shines ...
nICE (w)rite :J
 — JKWeb

hi unk,

her name is Diana.
a date on everest isn't a bad idea, though.

seriously, any moment i share with her, no
matter where, is more than enough.

thanks so much for reading.
: )
 — fractalcore

JKWebster sir,

thank you very much.
you're so kind.

: )
 — fractalcore

oh, two 1's in a row?

i'm getting so fond of your sweetness, unky.
c'mon, you got more? you should give more love --
your diabolic maneuvers.

; )
 — fractalcore

enjoy your gifts.
 — unknown

well, there used to be like 6 or so 1's in a row
when turd turns really turdy.

is this particular unk losing his grip or what?
if he can exist as 6 different clones, then he'd
better maximize his potential.

this is his chance.
; )
 — fractalcore

as long as we don't do what they do, we can't be touched. it's turning bitter like them, and eating your heart out that you can't write and you know you'll never be nothin' but a dog with no jelly-roll if you cain't write a poem. let us pray together for their withered soil... soul...

oh, gawd, where's the other shoe???
 — bmikebauer

awe, aye'em jest A-king four duh other fore once from hour
drrrrrrrunk friend -- oops, i mean, deer unk friend.

well, unky?
; )
 — fractalcore

the more you suck on bauer's shit, the more you earn the rewards of that. enjoy it.
 — unknown

l25-27 is lovely
 — peace

what -- so this is what i get for every bauer piece
i fave from now on?

why don't you show me your work so i can be fair
to you.

don't tell me you're jharrison too scared to expose
herself 'cause i ain't buying that shit. and, you seem
to know a lot of things about karma, too -- is that
from experience?

and, i will take all the other four 1's unwrapped, ok?
now's your chance to show the world how selfless you
are.

; )
 — fractalcore

peace,

thank you so much for giving this
your precious time. sorry for the
mess you got caught in.

it's just a loonar issue amongst loony
tics.

; )
 — fractalcore

consider the effect primordial. you stepped into the ooze of your own free will. time to pay the piper.
 — unknown

why lurk in the shadows of your fears, unk?

show me your real self -- or show me a real poem
of yours.

but, before that, gimme all the other 1's you got
to offer -- i'm not gonna enjoy with just two of
them.

don't get greedy on me now.

: )
 — fractalcore

you'll never have another poem in the top rated 15. believe that.
 — unknown

and why do i have to worry?
see who's playing his little games now?

i write 'cause i have to and 'cause i hold my
self responsible to my self. and, you, on the
other hand, don't even have to explain your
self to anybody now, do you?

you paint your self pretty well.

so, where's the rest of your gifts?
; )
 — fractalcore

it's called the bauer effect. very effective.
 — unknown

i think it's getting to be more of the 'unknown 1's'
effect now, doesn't it?

not that your 1's really matter, dude.
what really matters is that you're able to write your
'soul' out. fukk bauer's crit if they don't mean anything
to you. just keep on writing until your glitchy dark innards
bleed truth. if you don't want his crits on your precious,
please indicate so in the footnote or preface.

you'll be surprised in the end that how happy he is for
reading a real work of art from you -- that's because you
will have helped your self and you done it on your own.

all of us start out writing crappy stuff no matter at what
age. i, for one, can say that it's a never-ending learning
process.

take good care of yourself.
; )
 — fractalcore

i think it's getting to be more of the 'unknown 1's'
effect now, doesn't it?

not that your 1's really matter, dude.
what really matters is that you're able to write your
'soul' out. fukk bauer's crit if they don't mean anything
to you. just keep on writing until your glitchy dark innards
bleed truth. if you don't want his crits on your precious,
please indicate so in the footnote or preface.

you'll be surprised in the end how happy he is for reading
a real work of art from you -- that's because, by then, you
will have helped your self and done it on your own.

all of us start out writing crappy stuff no matter at what
age. i, for one, can say that it's a never-ending learning
process.

take good care of yourself.


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 — fractalcore

er:

i think it's getting to be more of the 'unknown 1's'
effect now, ISN'T it?

gee, dude, look at what effect you have.

; )
 — fractalcore

second hand suck ups from you, about the idiot bauer, are just compounding your fate here.
 — unknown

you are actually using the same format of thought, and phrasing as bauer, fractalcore. i used to have great respect for you. you can't even think for yourself. so, your actions define your karma.

here it is.
 — unknown

don't you get the reference yourself, unk?

it doesn't matter what you do or how many
1's you throw around.

just be true to yourself and write.
you just gotta try.

: )
 — fractalcore

wasn't there a thread awhile back on 'the bully of pc'? if this isn't the behavior of 'bully' then i'm unclear on what that thread must have meant, because it seems like that thread was started by 'unknown', and here she is back making unknown moves again and stepping in the cow-pies.
 — bmikebauer

mike, i won't know what to think of that thread if our
dear friend says i'm not able to think for myself.

so now i write like you, huh? i can only take that as
a compliment.

thanks for making it clear to me and thinking for me, unk.
; )
 — fractalcore

dang, and i aways thought that you were a model of 4 dimensional prose style. i suppose i'll have to model myself after her so that you can model myself after me.

yys-ook! spaak-bo. meekotch. peggbit... ig--nor! i hav had my ignor puuushed!
 — bmikebauer

she must be a 5-dimensional proser then, hehe.
strange how light can bend 5 ways at once.

well, you'll just have to ignore the light, yes.
; )
 — fractalcore

yes, right. ignore the light -- that's what's needed. no light. go away light. good night light.
 — bmikebauer

i think you've just scared one 1 away, mikee.
there's only 5 of them left.

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 — fractalcore

she thinks she's fighting a war for hearts and minds now. she's started making smurfy comments on poems and patronizing the natives. the rescinding of ones is a recognition that she made a very wrong move by attacking you.
 — bmikebauer

actually, no. there really have been five 1's since i last checked;
there's 4 on my other piece. all i'm saying is that sHe should give
it all.

the mind approaching singularity is a wonderful thing to see.
: )
 — fractalcore

well, maybe she could only by a half-pack of ones... it's the economy, and she's short of gin... my heart goes out to her on this cold cleveland night, and i hope she finds some kindness of a stranger -- sounds like a sugared brandy -- and tucks in for the night. maybe you'll find a couple of ones in your xmas stocking...
 — bmikebauer

i think they really owe me more ones for new year's.

thanks in advance.
; )
 — fractalcore

i recognize your writing style from a book of classic poetry.  it's neat the way you've stuck to it, done it to death, never felt the need to move on.  but when i say neat..


--  Chatty Owl
 — unknown

so others tried their hands on this style, too?
and which classic poetry book are you referring to?

i think this would need very 'neat' eyesight and
patience of mind to be appreciated at all.

: )
 — fractalcore

and, if i may add, it would be helpful for you to
maybe make some worthy discovery of other
styles the author may have explored by referring
to his poetry menu.

you don't have to place an order and pay --
everything there's free for everybody.

thanks for taking the time to read, by the way.
; )
 — fractalcore

it means looking through the whole book, page by page, until i find the author.. sorry does that sound lazy?  it could just be luck that you've hit upon the same style.. if i have a spare day, i'll look it up and drop it in ;)

--  Chatty Owl
 — unknown

thanks for the comeback, chatty owl.

yes, it'd be great if you could link that particular author/poetry.
also, i was hoping you'd be interested to investigate more into
the poetry menu of yours truly as, i'd like to believe, i cover a
relatively wide range of poetry writing, too, though my 'fractal'
poetry style seems to be the most prevalent.

happy new year to you and your family.

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