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rain.a.séance [[n]ewe]man
fractalcore

sic passim,
 1
luv-stuck,
 2
angst-driven
 3
deeds...
 4
 
 
were we once
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of them? of theirs?
 6
who
 7
all-wuss gives?
 8
 
 
mouths shut, we rut,
 9
spinning on-their-toes;
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ewe stir it, eye clear it,
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little doo they know...
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in passing, we remember
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          we'll pass dis way s'more;
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              we forget the past, d'clue:
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                welp, time's well-o'erdue --
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   ♥∞         ..   .-.. --- ...- .   -.-- --- ..-
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                we're stacked up turtles
 18
              reaching for the doves;
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          each other's wish, spittle,
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we should, must have.
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...ad hoc nerd-geek maybees,
 22
24/7 souled, ad infinitOm...
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aka '...code bee; morse sew itch day...'


for nisetru, my dearest.
H KNUD XNT with my whole being.
---{@


and, of course, for all the turtles
that got squished in the time-warp
highway.



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15 Dec 09

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Ok, I'm starting to appreciate this form, but hey, I'm old school, and a little slow, like the suished turtles. Fractaly speaking, when you come to the fork in the road, take it.
 — JohnW

...Om, Ok...

thanks for reading, JohnW dear sir.

; )
 — fractalcore

but, Om, deed ewe doo duh lil
ex-sir-size on line 17?

; )
 — fractalcore

..   .-.. --- ...- .   -.-- --- ..-
 — nisetru

..   .-.. --- ...- .   -.-- --- ..-
eternally & with all my being,
nisetru.

---{@

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 — fractalcore

any comments,

[er,]

any one[s]?


thanks in advance.
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 — fractalcore

again:
any comments,

[er,]

any one[s]?


thanks in advance.
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 — fractalcore

ones more...

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 — fractalcore

ahhh, this is a more lyrical-write singing from your pen then you've done before - though you've a style all your own in how you break-up the words to say what it is you've got to say, this wends 'n weaves in moves like leaves streaming down to the sea of another luminous-moving-us reality
 — AlchemiA

I gave you a 1 followed closely by a 0 which is when you're one it'll always be a-round
 — AlchemiA

ah zero wood've been most pur-fact,
butt thanks all duh say'em, Alc.

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 — fractalcore

boompfh...
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 — fractalcore

LOVERLY!! thanks
 — unknown

Love this love this...awesome
 — psychofemale

unk,

thanks OVERLY.
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 — fractalcore

thank you, thank you, oh some
psychofemale.

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 — fractalcore

This is especially adventurously good and big on powerful imagery while almost throwing itself away
 — larrylark

thanks a lot, larry sir lark.

did you see the turtledoves in there?
i tried to break that image into several others
and hoped someone could still see the big picture.

actually, i was reading some mr hawking guy and
prolly the bird in his name led to this. of course,
there were other more important things going on
in my mind , as usual, so this is quite a bit of every
thought i had then.

i read this now and i'm thrown back in time.
thank you for popping up around here leaving your
precious thoughts.


yours truly,

fractal disposable core
; )
 — fractalcore

boompfh.
: )
 — fractalcore

x*p
 — fractalcore

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