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The little fool
matrinh20

The little fool has lost her way.
 1
As clouds of fog for roll far and grey
 2
A bell clangs out across the bay,
 3
The little fool has lost her way.
 4
 
 
What fear or shock or strange malady
 5
Should blind her to that memory?
 6
What dreadful events to convey
 7
Caused her to be a castaway?
 8
 
 
The vista’s a forlorn survey,
 9
No mark of time to gauge the day,
 10
No justice here or equity.
 11
The world now seems so far away.
 12
 
 
Whose dreams are these where margins stray?
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On glassy sea’s, the sky will lay.
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The calm upon her nerves will fray,
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And now, how this becomes so fey.
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Through veils of misty density,
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Appear the shapes of fantasy,
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The masks of death and sea’s decay
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Turn to stare, to watch her darkly.
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Sea spectres form a grim display,
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Malevolent, grotesquely gay,
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And all around she hears them bray
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‘The little fool has lost her way’.
 24
 
 
Deep in the depths, a serpent’s flay
 25
Sets the craft in violent sway,
 26
The rise and fall, the crash and spray,
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To wrench her from mortality.
 28
 
 
Downward glides the lifeless body,
 29
Beyond the reach of solar ray,
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Down below the waves and eddy
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The little fool has lost her way.
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21 Dec 09

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aw. bumma. do you think you possibly make 'eddy'  . .. 'teddy'?
 — unknown

No I bloody well can't, you bloody idiot!
 — matrinh20

This is an interesting poem in form and story. I can't say that I am a fan of the repetitive rhyme, but if used, I think should maintain consistency, as in; equity, day, survey, away, equity doesn't fit, the same with mortality, same misfit. This is hard to do and requires much thought and patience. Good luck!
 — JohnW

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