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I Feel so shallow between her legs
Brandxxx

the powder blue
 1
the broken structures
 2
i listen to
 3
left
 4
for her
 5
because of her
 6
i knew the time it took
 7
when the lights would go out
 8
i caught her on the stairs
 9
i caught her in the stars
 10
she came and she went
 11
the nightly mess
 12
of my life
 13
so wonderful when im livin
 14
with the lights in my eyes
 15
smiles and crys
 16
i set all of that meandering
 17
crossed out mindbomb
 18
bullshit aside
 19
to touch her
 20
and know her
 21
all of me
 22
for just a little bit of her
 23
moan in the moonlight
 24
drinks and drugs
 25
livin young
 26
only gonna make her love me
 27
but i felt so shallow between her legs
 28
nice memories
 29
and damning eyes
 30
for me on the stairs
 31
drinkin vodka
 32
for the taste of the past.
 33

13 Mar 04

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I like the feel of this poem but it's kinda ruined for me with your last 2 lines... just broke the flow of it if you know what I mean...
 — treerain

Yea, I agree with 'Treerain' on the last two lines brakin' the flow of the poem, but other than, that is is really good! I really like it a lot!
 — red87rokr06

Wow. Good poem. I love lines 9 and 10. I agree with the ending two lines. But good. I liked it
 — DrvwayBeauty

i like the last two lines, i might add a -g- to drinkin, just for the sound but other than that, i like it a lot
 — unknown

l16 *cries, was it a typo or deliberate? um..its good. different, but it flows. title is a smudge long, but the idea of it you should definitely keep.
 — wendz

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