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youmee childishmess
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twooth bwee twold --
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maybee
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wee are old
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enough to see
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clearly
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yet toy with names,
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mmm'old emo-shuns
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in-two games,
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grinding against
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each other's crown
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of thee
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answer-twin
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order
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till our gums bleed
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from the tug-owe-warp,
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till wisdom's teethered
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on come-on ground...
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wee are
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naked kids
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again,
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as ewe-so-will.
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for my nisetru
with all the love in the world
---{@


thanks for the 'youmee' [yummy]
concept


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1 Jan 10

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we'll always be kids as well, alongside wise :)
the poem is youmee and perfect. is playful and a love poem. i find the first line to be like tweety talkin, and is my favorite, as is the mentioning of the children games as standing for molding emotions.
love it very much, speaks the truth :)
 — nisetru

i can't write about anyone or anything other than
you and i and the cosmos, nisetru.

H KNUD XNT with my whole being forever.
---{@


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boompfh.

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again,

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bamphf

nice. thanks
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thanks as well.
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