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prayer 6
bykguy2000

still, mosquitoes have prevented young lovers
 1
 
 
ow, this hurts
 2
sorry, babe
 3
lets get out of here
 4
okay
 5
 
 
maybe you have no opinion on the matter, and feel nothing
 6
is it possible you have no sympathy for young lovers
 7
or you have lost patience with the inexperienced
 8
who stumble into candy stores  
 9
maybe we should think about their needs
 10
 
 
im sorry
 11
i am a sad drunken letter
 12
its the rain
 13
did this happen
 14
 
 
the mosquito is better than me
 15
he is not spiteful or brave, but a mosquito
 16
he does what mosquitoes do
 17
he does not make mistakes
 18
with my help he will live a hundred years in this room
 19
drinking from my children as they sleep
 20
i try to throw the bed sheets over him and smother him
 21
fool
 22
fool
 23
 
 
sometimes babies cry at night
 24
or dogs bark
 25
where are you?
 26
 
 
a white butterfly that turns invisible when it lands
 27
drinks a beer
 28
i don’t mind if you want the lights off
 29
lots of things make sense
 30
im sure im going to hell
 31
its sad
 32
i don’t want to go
 33

13 Jan 10

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Comments:

I really like this. It's very powerful.
 — laura352

damn, you kill me with this stuff.
=-)
 — jenakajoffer

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