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point: across: sticks: ticks: tics
fractalcore

dip'in
 1
inside the green,
 2
all grin turns blue --
 3
nay -- naught is in:
 4
away are ewe.
 5
 
 
just drift,
 6
incite a tryst --
 7
gee, has gut' to trust,
 8
annihilatadvice;
 9
near, ne'er gone...
 10
inside of me:
 11
e'er one.
 12




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many things may transpire
but i know no expiry


for nisetru
with all the love
in the universe
---{@


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30 Jan 10

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Nice poem.  Had to do a bit of deciphering but 'twas worth it.  I especially like how in line nine, you combined the words.  Enjoyed reading.
 — JKWeb

why not "you" on 5?
 — DeformedLion

thanks, JKWebster sir.
: )
 — fractalcore

DeformedLion,

ewe gnaw woot aye mean.
; )
 — fractalcore

boompfh

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 — fractalcore

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