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When You Think About me
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Have you ever had one of those
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            moments
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A rare occurrence of anger
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                  when
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You feel like your veins are smoking pipes
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                       You
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know your emotions could physically
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burn some one, but you
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                            think
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"Maybe I'll burn this page instead"
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You sit down awkwardly to write
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                                 about
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Us, but the ink is dry and the pen is
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bent and nothing. comes. out.
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The page is crumpled, burnt, and bare
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Just like
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                                                   me.
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4 Feb 10

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Comments:

I like it.  Took me a sec. to see how your title correlated with the poem.  Nice structure too.  Enjoyed reading. *occurence
 — JKWeb

*occurrence...oops
 — JKWeb

i very much lyk it. the structure is great.
 — firerocket

This is very good!
 — mandolyn

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