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call-her blind
fractalcore

[duct-apes]
 1
sugar green
 2
 
 
indigo mold
 3
sun blue
 4
 
 
blind white
 5
brown flame
 6
 
 
turd silver
 7
from the bottom
 8
 
 
mist red
 9
 
 
or eye must've
 10
just misread
 11
 
 
ore
 12
lead violet
 13
led astray
 14
on an ash[ed] ray
 15
 
 
pink pupil
 16
 
 
till they spill
 17
must read out loud
 18
on neon yellow
 19
clouds
 20
 
 
purple punks
 21
 
 
till they spells
 22
must dig out proud
 23
on freon below
 24
junks
 25
 
 
adjunct hue
 26
ego black
 27
 
 
ready red
 28
off-white tax
 29
 
 
purple spells
 30
white the hell
 31
 
 
free-knee-on junk
 32
egg-white frank
 33
 
 
red joke on
 34
yoga yellow
 35
 
 
spleen green
 36
brown yogurt
 37
 
 
souldirt.
 38




written feb 19, 2010
http://poetrycritical.net/forum/read/216287/


[thanks to mandolyn, jenakajoffer,
JKWebster sir, and DeformedLinus
for the colorful exchange]


for my sunflower, nisetru,
from your sun, a blackhole
without hue
---{@


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fractalcore
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we've all got an inner-blonde, an inner-idiot, a moron and dim-wit with which we relate to when we don't get it -- not seeing this is the overtly-educated conceit that planning what you say, mangling many metaphors, will make it complete -- we fall over our words, tumbling down to where cliche' is more like playing the clown - we excite to absurdity when our inner-idiot stares at the dumb things smart people compare; like why is bra singular and panties plural? -- our home is merCuriously illuMentating 'round a black-hole, where all the light 'n dirty cloths go -- where insight is an invertendo move, in which giving more than you get, is really love --

but its been said before by those smarter than me, if it weren't for the inner-moron we'd not experience glee ...

fractal, you slam-jamming, jejune-hamming, jaunty-juiced writer, shooting from the hip with your lip like a yoga-yellow lighter ... heh heh
— AlchemiA         &nb sp;[!]

Cool poem.  Though I'd omit line 22.  It disrupted the flow a bit me thinks.  Also, I think a more suitable title would be 'call her color blind'.  What do you think ?  Otherwise, nice write.
— JKWeb           [!]

thanks, JKWebster sir.

but |22 is there shake the reader just a bit --
a little tremor there, if you like.

it was fun exchanging words with you again.
; )
— fractalcore           [!]

ey Alc, i've just noticed i ended up with .38 lines in this.
i think the headstand was really meant to dig holes in
the skull by spinning on the head so the inner-moron
could be grounded.

; )
— fractalcore           [!]
 — fractalcore

indigo, come on, you have a whole rainbow.
 — unknown

a whole in the rainbow!

that's amazing!
; )
 — fractalcore

look fact, you just an't taking this ....
 — unknown

taking this where?

i got dirt all over the floor.
wear your yoga shoos.

; )
 — fractalcore

ok, see-eye-klan,

i need to hear some serious thought
from you regarding this.

tell me where i did wrong and what
to do.

: )
 — fractalcore

15,18
19-on
out - 23
on-24
dot on 38
 — unknown

close enuff to being the wrong answer
but thanks for playing, hehehehehe.

no, seriously, are you on drags?
have been itching to switch to 'ashed ray'
there for awhile now and the on-ins are
fixed fixtures on the wall.

23 is my fave michael jordan number so
it stays, too.

and the dot on .38 maybe means you should
read the whole thing in one single breath, hehe.

but this is not like doing 26 non-stop i-knows
in 'aint no sunshine when she's gone' so it would
really be pushing it too far if you did have one
single breath left but spend it on this perforated
rainbow.

what's the color of melancholy, sir_I _clan?
can you tell me?
; )
 — fractalcore

you're a tad slow today
so i just went ahead and
rode the ash[ed] ray.

; )
 — fractalcore

what do you think?
; )
 — fractalcore

beed-yoooo-hooooth[h]...

you still dare?
; )
 — fractalcore

Hehehehehe.
Methinks werds wok wa-key.
My thumb is up-- no TWO are up.
;)
 — mandolyn

two thumbs down
too dumbs cram
balls on the rubber
ground --

word tutu ears:
lease in two
rubber tears...

; )
 — fractalcore

year mum
;)
 — mandolyn

year mOm ease bald, aye know.

when [h]air heats the ground, eat hertz.

; )
 — fractalcore

year mawm
ees
john stamos
eye no.
fists heet fays
wack wack wack.
 — mandolyn

satori emos
daunt knead
an eye, know.

what collar ease
duh bleak row?

zero ease
where? hOme
ease

dare.

ewe?

; )
 — fractalcore

heed hurteth
me eye twitcheth
 — mandolyn

bury thee
hatchet
with a bleak
flaglet of
piglet

pooh-oy-n'-ant
with hunny...

; )
 — fractalcore

love love love.
 — Casiobone

so there's a bounty in your marrow?

thanks.
; )
 — fractalcore

die've, doe've, duh've,

what else do i have?

; )
 — fractalcore

you've blood in your veins
and a medal to your name.

;)
 — mandolyn

oh, i licke it when it rains,
this me-dull as big as a
much-room-head.

; )
 — fractalcore

hmm, i miss doing dis:

boompfh!
: )
 — fractalcore

interesting
 — psychofemale

thank you.
; )
 — fractalcore

boompfh...
; )
 — fractalcore

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 — unknown

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i do not really grasp all of writer's intent. is this an apology for 14? not that the cliche 14 is next door but |14. how does she cope w/ ashed tray,did she not see smoke? is this a revival? i like revelations as this.
 — unknown

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