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linus inspired, carps himself
DeformedLion

I WOULD fuck me ( but that's besides the point? and always sometimes true), but you YOU
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gumdrop, banana splitter,
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dresser of fancies...sometimes
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your shoes curl inwards
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as if embarrassed by your feet,
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maybe your toes want to hug your
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heel.
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it makes you cry though, when i howl,
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when my puppy dog leg rises, rubs,
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spills its secrets into yours.
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makes me sad for that, my blanket
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stain of Mary, my Sally of soiled
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offerings.
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kind of off too,
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likening you to a jellyfish would be stupid
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because you are a human being
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and i aint into no bestiality.
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you are though, i guess, want ta
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rub ma poodle. he is Scottish.
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and likes to be scratched
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but not too hard, just a bit,
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in betweens-- you know:
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licks and kisses, soft kisses,
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caress and hug...love???
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maybe i would say that,
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as i fold my leg(s),
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could probably endear myself
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to your sunshine,
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slip myself, every now and then,
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from the mouth of your
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ovaries.
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3 Mar 10

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I feel an inside story coming on....
 — mandolyn

love the inside references linus.  
it's got passion and the many things that make a creative and sentimental carp.

the poem seems to carry a slightly bitter tone to it, though
and almost made me cry in parts.
=-)

(you ended with ovaries, ha, how bizarre, but i get it). ;)  
 — jenakajoffer

i think maybe this is my version of a love poem, to you.
 — DeformedLion

i have to poke my nose in and say
you should remove 'would be stupid'
and change 'from' the mouth, to 'into' the mouth.

8-13 is my fave and blows me away.  thanks for mentioning Sally. ;)
great love pomme, thanks a.
 — jenakajoffer

hahaha, he is Scottish.  nice to read again
this was a good time of inspiration.
 — jenakajoffer

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