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Brian
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Word spread that you were crazy.
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Married, divorced.
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Stationed in Texas and a shotgun in your lap.
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She left you, was spitting teeth,
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but you're a gentleman (at least that hasn't changed) and
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you flew here, back here! Into that crumbling apartment
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overlooking the old D.
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That last letter you sent me
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written while you were reading "Choke",
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("Feeling sick. Careless. Biding my time with Vicodin.")
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that should've set me off...
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How utterly angry you are!
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That all your childhood followers have strayed,
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each with a blooming thought or two.
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No girlfriend, habit, book trend,
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nothing contributed to you...
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"We're bitter people, you and I."
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No better for it. But at my simplest,
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I am waiting
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to hear my name, (four winding flights up)
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to come downstairs and find you
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horns low and tail tucked neat between your legs
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to tell you, "Just go back."
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8 Mar 10

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I don't know exactly what to say to this... It doesn't male sense so I'm assuming it has a context...? It's pretty good, though, considering I don't know what it's about.
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