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on fighting
flourides

a dead sinking hunch,
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sack of third grade lunch
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was all i needed to put four
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knuckles into the chest of bradley b
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following a dispute over
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whether or not that was a first down
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and was i only skipping out
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of bounds because i was chicken
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right before i hit him i said and meant
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'fuck' for the first time
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and immediately afterwards i was sorry
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bradley b was my friend, who had brothers
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that would go on to iraq, to afghanistan,
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to buy us beer on bradley's sixteenth
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birthday when we hardly knew
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what to do with it
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at the stop-n-save, one of the brothers said with
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a grin that he had nearly died for us
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so the least we could do was have a drink with him
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it was a logic that i would come to understand
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later, as i recalled the buttons of bradley's shirt
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and the way they felt when i hit them and
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how he didn't even get angry because he
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could have pounded me if he wanted and
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then i would have been a lot less likely
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to have that drink
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8 Mar 10

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