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3.16.10

1. Neruda’s Beads
 1
 
 
in the pale moon of your neck
 2
a spider’s lulling flower, two beads
 3
rolling inside the hollows of your face
 4
open, willingly before your born
 5
 
 
2. pinecone.
 6
 
 
i am
 7
the sum of
 8
the nestled vales,
 9
plucked seeds
 10
and hurtled cones,
 11
that stem from
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the muddy limbs
 13
of your inner
 14
forest
 15
 
 
3. I like to meet in tongues
 16
 
 
behind the walls of your inner ear
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my tongue, like a cold metal key
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licking the sweet apple of your skull
 19
 
 
4. Black and white-67
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into the green, the brass cases
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like a fountain of shiny pennies
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“this is nuts, brother…” says Martin, as he
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takes one to the gut, one to the face
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our point-man, down, a barrage of hot led,
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mortars, and the noxious stench of napalm
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till all is silent but for a few static chirps  
 27
of radio chatter on the eastern front
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5. Sanctuary-67
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sitting in Dong Ha
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beyond the red eyes of Gio Linh
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an old priest, consumed
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by dirt, dust, communion
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and the horror of death’s echo
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6. Orca
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behind the grave of your weeping ivy
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the ghost of your bruised sea
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drifts into a yellow mosaic
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of rusting shame
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7. Death and Ghosts
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twice now, you have burdened me
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with the insubstantial words
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of your feeble mind, soaking
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the edges of your idle, white, fingers
 44
 
 
8. orgasmatron
 45
 
 
de•cep•ti•con  [dih-sep-ti-kon]
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-noun
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   1. a trans-sexual, a he-she, demigod queen of injected silicon
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   2. a rear-ender, a man-storming, transforming monkey with a slick-red shotgun
 49
   3. not a go-bot
 50
 
 
9. Be’MikeBauer
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for mike on his birthday
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two tired men
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for his ole
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dis’colored peter
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10. book of honest poems #1 i stole my wife’s smile
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two thousand
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and four notes later
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i still can’t get her
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to believe
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that it was never a matter of love
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never a matter of choice
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just that the car seat
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was too goddamn
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comfortable
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to leave
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11. linus inspired buffalo bill (repssst!)
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he had the ugliest one
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ever- but sometimes
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i’d fall to my knees
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bobbing at his size 9
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noodle like a chicken
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till he’d come all over
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my face with his
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sick sailor’s junk
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12. Grunts-67
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hell is
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disco dancing
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with your mother
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while she skirts
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at your belt buckle
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and tongues
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your handgun
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till your eyes
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glaze over
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and you grunt
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in horror
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13. Cheshire Cat-67
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when young boys jostle
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to be first to touch the pink
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and have their hard-stick
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held and played with
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you’re bound to find a few
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grinning, in their sleep
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14. Existence in Poetic Space
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out of an old red trunk
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the ghost of her secrets
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fingers her vast spaces
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till she writhes and shakes
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into a night of descending
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          loneliness
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15. Brittaney
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trembling like a needle
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in a smoke filled room
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I kissed the flesh of her
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tight money-junk
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11 Mar 10

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you're inventive and tongue-in-cheek ironic which makes this a piece about the conceit, the little flaw in the PC pantheon, replete with casual way we gotta' say what we gotta say, eh ... made me smile awhile
 — AlchemiA

Very cool! Really unique a 10 mos def! You should do it for Newest, Recently Commented, and Recent Best.
 — BxPR

rather smart of you, making us all re-read the top-rated list to see what you did in comparison.  i think mine is the worst of them all, but then, i can appreciate fun.  bruised sea and rusting shame is terrible no matter what or why you're writing.  you should be ashamed.  hehe.
 — jenakajoffer

is this oldshoe? whatever, it sure is talented.
 — unknown

... thought your shoe senyru was rather feeble though.
 — unknown

it's more like creative borrowing.  we could all do this,
so hey, let's have a contest!  (j/k).

like i said, it's good
and it's fun to do this but i wouldn't go too far with the talent thing
until our jesus writes his own poems.  
 — jenakajoffer

Just doing this at all was talented.
 — unknown

campbell's soup cans lined up in a row so you can see a pattern, doncha'know
 — unknown

either all the top's are written in blog-style, or you've stylized them out into your own blogger verse style. you've written weak-style to ingratiate, but only talk about these things because they came in some box mis-delivered to your door and you're pretty upset about it. just throw the stuff in the trash and poem out of it.
 — bmikebauer

Well, it's obvious you can copy but can you write your own?
 — Isabelle5

he's only writing his own -- this isn't copying, it's just arting-out. the question is why? and, if it's envy then it's its own reward.
 — bmikebauer

You're off to a good start keep it up.
 — BxPR

A bit sensational. I like these versions much better than the originals - but only because you didn't do me. :)
 — unknown

the unknown smile of a Cheshire-cat with a wit that's as sharp as a tack, just as deep too ...
 — unknown

i'd ditch the expand part since you didn't actually expand.
 — jenakajoffer

I second that motion.
 — unknown

It expands.  From a title to the top 15.
 — unknown

That was awesome. And I think I like your Brittany more than mine.
Good jorb there indeed,
It's nice to see someone not take everything so seriously.
Either or, I really liked some of your verses.
Thank you.
 — Solstice

My kind of poem! Very nice especially #7. you get hte highest rating form me.
 — Redlander

Different and so outstanding.
 — Ebony

" ... but managed to extract from the restriction itself a further delicate thought, like good poets whom the tyranny of rhyme forces into the discovery of their finest lines." -- Marcel Proust, Swann's Way
 — AlchemiA

Four 1's from a single IP Address.  

Someone's feelings got hurt.  

That's ok.

Jesus still loves you.
 — unknown

It's not that someone's feelings were hurt it's just plain old envy and jealousy. Someone one or a few can't take it when a poet gets high marks for something they don't like or achieve a position they can't and so 1s! It shows the level of their maturity. You can usually tell because they don't have the nerve or sincerity to just give a 5 or a 6 when they don't like it and at least have the guts to use a screen name. Instead it's but a series of 1s to get you down from a place their work doesn't have the ability or creativity to achieve. They're a group of cowards hiding behind being unknown. If you like a piece give it a good rating and put your screen name! If not also  leave your screen name and have the creative integrity to give it a low rating but not 1s! That is so petty and inmature and unamerican. That's specifically for who I suspect did this act of creative vandalism. Anyway this is a nice piece of poetry creative, different and worthy of the number one place it had before the poet visogoths, and I meant that in the nicestest way, decided to mob/vigilanty mentality.
 — BxPR

the 1 1 1 1's are from mong, the manic-mom of PC trying to tell us what is good for all the little boys and girls
 — unknown

Really? And who is "the manic-mom of PC"? Pray tell.
 — BxPR

how do you know the IP address unless you are a moderator here? only the mods can see the list of IP's linked with posts here.

is that you Keats? if it is, go fuck yourself.
 — unknown

the 1 1 1 1's are from mong, the manic-mom of PC trying to tell us what is good for all the little boys and girls
— unknown         &nbs p;[!]

this was posted by bmikebauer. his IP is on  it.
 — unknown

Mr. Anal Retentive? I mean bmikebaurer. it figures. What a pathetic dweeb, really.
 — BxPR

Hey so when A.R. writes "the frustrated question from me comes AFTER the games you've played avoiding any serious writer discussion on your work." it's all hypocracy like him isn't it? What a sanctimonyous A.R. dweeb. I was correct about his level or lack of maturity.
 — BxPR

Huh?
 — unknown

yay for the current #1!!!

; )
 — fractalcore

Which one?
 — unknown

hah, well you keep 'em coming like a modern hero, conflicted, hanging cross-wise, riddled with the voices of creative-destruction for unlocking the integrity of doubt
 — AlchemiA

don't you mean unlocking creativity by doubting the integrity of the voices?
 — unknown

A very very accomplished piece. Illustrious.

I thoroughly enjoyed this!
 — laura352

This is too much to take in at once. Been awhile since I've dropped in, please forgive.
 — mould_jesus

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