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"Don't run with scissors!"

I                                                               I
    R                                                      R
       A                                                 A
          N                                            N
              W                                  W
                  I                              I
                    T                         T
                       H                   H
                            S         S
                               C   C
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               I should have listened to Mom

18 Mar 10

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 — mandolyn

 — Tandisol

Always listen to mom! :)
 — Tandisol


 — DeformedLion

jesus christ!
 — unknown





Thank you all for reading and comment.  Much appreciated.
 — JKWeb

very nice visual as usual,
JKWebster sir.

; )
 — fractalcore

Thanks a bunch.  Glad you like it.
 — JKWeb

    Your Ars longa, vita brevis so continue on maestro... j.g. smiles
 — goeszon

when you cut and run there is a lingering affair that makes folks pinch there nose and stare -- nice visuals -- I'd imagine that you ran with scissors fairly often while engaged as a medic -- well done Doc!
 — AlchemiA

Hey Web, nice puzzle. But change the title, dude.
 — NicMichaels

Thank you for reading and comment...
Ars longa,
vita brevis,
occasio praeceps,
experimentum periculosum,
iudicium difficile

 — JKWeb

Thanks for reading and cool crit.
Much appreciated.
 — JKWeb

Glad you like the "puzzle" aspect.  The title has evaded me like a scissor rip.  Any suggestions?  Thanks.
 — JKWeb

Hmmm. U could go tangental with something like "Eat your vegetables" or take it to the level of metaphor and name the poem after some adult-sized screwup like "Foreclosure." Modern, "Scissorplay." Or how about just "Snip."
 — NicMichaels

Thanks for the suggestions NicMichaels but I was thinking along the lines of:
'It's not a Baton'
I was thinking relay race or something like that.  What do you think?
 — JKWeb

How about something like "If your friends told you to jump off a cliff, would you?" or "She also told me to Eat my Vegetables" or some other play on the common "mom-isms" we moms like to use on our children.
 — Tandisol

Thanks for re-looking and suggestions.  Still pondering.......
 — JKWeb

Relay race? Ya lost me.
 — NicMichaels

 — BxPR

Thanks again.  In a relay, the runners run and pass the baton hence:
'It's not a baton'
Anyway, shall stick with this title for the time being...and ponder more
 — JKWeb

Thanks for reading and nice brief comment.
 — JKWeb

I wish it had a better title, but it's still nice. :3 Kudos.
 — irisiis

Thanks for reading and comment.  Actually, I was thinking of a re-title today...maybe something like 'Snippet' ...hmmm.  Anyway, thanks again.
 — JKWeb

Oh, you can't hide from us, we know who does the best art poems!  Another good one!   I dropped a scissors on my big toe, once, it went right down to the bone and stood up straight!  I couldn't even believe it!  I still have the scar!  I wasn't even running!  hahaha!
 — Isabelle5

     Ouch! Thanks for reading and the nice words.  
 — JKWeb

This one's a CUT above the REST!  Hehe.  Very cool how u do THAT, JK!  Isabelle's little account just made my genitals shrink (for a second.)  Yikes!  :-O
 — starr

Thanks for reading and commenting.  In answer to your inquiry...lots of cut (no pun intended) and paste from word.  
 — JKWeb

lol, well done!
 — sybarite

Thanks...glad you got a laugh.
 — JKWeb

 — Callisto

thanks Callisto
for reading.  Glad you like.
 — JKWeb

'comedy club poetry minute'. no way to critique one-move games.
 — bmikebauer

Thanks MikeB
for having a look

Egy lépés, egy pár olló
 — JKWeb

that's, what, hungarian? can you write poetry in hungarian? i'll bet it would kick-ass if you could: you'd have to make it dance the dance.
 — bmikebauer

 — psychofemale

hahaha, crazy!
 — poette

Many thanks psychofemale and poette
for reading and comment(s).
 — JKWeb

very fun and interesting! :)
 — pants

Thanks pants-
I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.
 — JKWeb

A very precise and appropriate 'shape poem', if you did not alread know.
It cuts...deeply to the fertile south of being while giving tribute to its original giver.
Thank you!
 — unknown

Thank you much unknown
for having a look and the nice feedback.  Gratitude.
 — JKWeb

 — unknown

Thanks unknown
for looking and the one-word nod.
 — JKWeb

Bet this was a real pain to do.  Worth it though!
 — MarcusLane

Thanks a bunch for having a look.  Cut/copy and paste is the name of the game.
 — JKWeb

 — Rss233

thanks for checkin' it out
fffffpp  :J
 — JKWeb