|"Don't run with scissors!"
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I should have listened to Mom
18 Mar 10
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Always listen to mom! :)
Thank you all for reading and comment. Much appreciated.
very nice visual as usual,
Thanks a bunch. Glad you like it.
Your Ars longa, vita brevis so continue on maestro... j.g. smiles
when you cut and run there is a lingering affair that makes folks pinch there nose and stare -- nice visuals -- I'd imagine that you ran with scissors fairly often while engaged as a medic -- well done Doc!
Hey Web, nice puzzle. But change the title, dude.
Thank you for reading and comment...
Thanks for reading and cool crit.
Glad you like the "puzzle" aspect. The title has evaded me like a scissor rip. Any suggestions? Thanks.
Hmmm. U could go tangental with something like "Eat your vegetables" or take it to the level of metaphor and name the poem after some adult-sized screwup like "Foreclosure." Modern, "Scissorplay." Or how about just "Snip."
Thanks for the suggestions NicMichaels but I was thinking along the lines of:
'It's not a Baton'
I was thinking relay race or something like that. What do you think?
How about something like "If your friends told you to jump off a cliff, would you?" or "She also told me to Eat my Vegetables" or some other play on the common "mom-isms" we moms like to use on our children.
Thanks for re-looking and suggestions. Still pondering.......
Relay race? Ya lost me.
Thanks again. In a relay, the runners run and pass the baton hence:
'It's not a baton'
Anyway, shall stick with this title for the time being...and ponder more
Thanks for reading and nice brief comment.
I wish it had a better title, but it's still nice. :3 Kudos.
Thanks for reading and comment. Actually, I was thinking of a re-title today...maybe something like 'Snippet' ...hmmm. Anyway, thanks again.
Oh, you can't hide from us, we know who does the best art poems! Another good one! I dropped a scissors on my big toe, once, it went right down to the bone and stood up straight! I couldn't even believe it! I still have the scar! I wasn't even running! hahaha!
Ouch! Thanks for reading and the nice words.
This one's a CUT above the REST! Hehe. Very cool how u do THAT, JK! Isabelle's little account just made my genitals shrink (for a second.) Yikes! :-O
Thanks for reading and commenting. In answer to your inquiry...lots of cut (no pun intended) and paste from word.
lol, well done!
Thanks...glad you got a laugh.
for reading. Glad you like.
'comedy club poetry minute'. no way to critique one-move games.
for having a look
Egy lépés, egy pár olló
that's, what, hungarian? can you write poetry in hungarian? i'll bet it would kick-ass if you could: you'd have to make it dance the dance.
Many thanks psychofemale and poette
for reading and comment(s).
very fun and interesting! :)
I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.
A very precise and appropriate 'shape poem', if you did not alread know.
It cuts...deeply to the fertile south of being while giving tribute to its original giver.
Thank you much unknown
for having a look and the nice feedback. Gratitude.
for looking and the one-word nod.
Bet this was a real pain to do. Worth it though!
Thanks a bunch for having a look. Cut/copy and paste is the name of the game.
thanks for checkin' it out