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Carp
jenakajoffer

-catshit grins; bears teet-
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sometimes i like
 2
an after-bath
 3
unlike most kipper-
 4
licking
 5
flick and spittle
 6
 
 
i paw your youth
 7
mewling
 8
heart blank and
 9
buzzing
 10
 
 
fountain bursts
 11
with our nippling; star-
 12
fish kiss
 13
and carp seed.
 14

for my blue-baby

31 Mar 10

Rated 9.7 (8.1) by 3 users.
Active (3): 8, 9
Inactive (6): 6, 6, 7, 7, 10, 10, 10

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it's tongue-ticklish at least
 — aurelius

as long as it tickled something, i'm happy.
 — jenakajoffer

oh it's jen, you crazy beeeiiiitch
 — aurelius

ohhhh yeah....;)

we be sessy tonight yeah, so is that other dude, coming in the park.  ew.  ew.
 — jenakajoffer

don't know...brushes over things and then remains inside you like...ejaculate, i s'pose. the animals know their place though, that is something.
 — DeformedLion

your (hee hee) much too nice to me.
 — DeformedLion

splatter-pussy and dart-mouth come together... asses to ashes, lust to dust, coming then going as we must
 — AlchemiA

doesn't make a lot of sense, pretty gross imagery.
 — unknown

Oooh love it! Very fun. Nice work.
 — ishtarboy300

this is terrible
i was surprised
 — unknown

What happens when Lewis Carroll finds his way into an internet porn site. Bravo.
 — PaleHorse

the 'at' in 7 arches this into looking at the poet, when i want to stay inside the poet's head. the harmonic off of the 'at' in 12 might be a structuring feeling, but i don't think this needs that kind of external bracing, unless you're changing your voice now, becoming introspective, and this is the first day of the rest of your poetry?
 — bmikebauer

i am just nice, linus, not too.

thanks alch, unk, ishtar.

pH, i had to laugh at that comment, seeing how i just saw alice.  thanks :)

mike, i like that thought.  thanks, i deleted both 'at's.  
changing my voice?  explain that idea.  
 — jenakajoffer

you got one of those kippers 'n sex things going on here, hmm?
my favourite kind
 — stout

I like your poem but would like it better if you omitted 'lick and' from line 6.  A slight bump from an otherwise nice read.
 — JKWeb

nah, keep lick. the bump is good. and god.
 — DeformedLion

kippers n sex, nothing better!
haha, thanks :)

jk, i simply must lick and spittle.  thanks for the suggestion, i really do see the smooth you're referring to, but i want hiccup. :)

linus, hehe, the bump is god.  i like that.
 — jenakajoffer

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