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prayers to a disillusioned god
silentspring

cold sweat morning.
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Too deaf for noise
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but again the lacquered thoughts.
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They come with faded illumination,
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death being but a single way of loss,
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and pressed onto my mind
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so haphazardly printed on the backs of eyes
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I see blind anger fleeting.
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Though it may take months, hours,
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possible to count in solar eclipse increments
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it too passes, a meteor in the night.
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Fallen but to those who lack the rights of sleep.
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And undeserving {we} fail
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to see the in betweens
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Tiptoe our way through worded barrages
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of perfection and discipline.
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Utter Destruction. they find us aggressive
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and the passive few who falter don't recognize
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our own mutilation's already begun.
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The clock's hit an hour and tossed me from bed
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but the light's yet to rise
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and there are still whispered prayers
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to a disillusioned god. Somewhere.
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That the death of night be painless.
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or at the very least,
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be only felt by those of us
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Who failed to watch it live.
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18 Apr 10

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Neat poem
 — psychofemale

thanks
 — silentspring

anyone else?
 — silentspring

I think I might like this more if it was capitalized. I don't know why but I feel it needs that. Some parts of this are just spectacular: "lacquered thoughts", "worded barrages of perfection and discipline", "whispered prayers to a disillusioned god", "death of night be painless". Beautiful write. If you capitalized the right parts, I would like it more. (As it is now it fades into the background too much rather than grabbing my attention as it should because of all the lowercase. Just me though and my humble opinion.)
 — elysium

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 — silentspring

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