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iv: 'in vivo'
fractalcore

in vitriol,
 1
virulent, the violence
 2
of the infamous
 3
quark --
 4
 
 
succulent heroine,
 5
break the leaking
 6
juice of the jaws
 7
 
 
in shrubs:
 8
nostalgic green
 9
in quirky spirals,
 10
learning curves
 11
from a distant
 12
burp:
 13
 
 
eternity is so beautiful it sucks!
 14
 
 
common turf, it lurks
 15
frozen: a shadow
 16
of the moment
 17
of the aye.vow.in.the...
 18
now.that.eye.know --
 19
 
 
limbs stretch like
 20
quantum waves
 21
never knowing a-due.
 22




written 3/18/10

originally for someone who i thought
would stay, but didn't.

an excerpt from 'play dough or doughn't:'
http://poetrycritical.net/read/62064/

thought it deserved its own space
as a poem on its own, hence
this repost of sorts.


BUT,

as of today, december 22, 2011 [PST],
things have changed their course in my
paradigm, and this poem has found its
rightful recipient,

my black swan.


---{@


     ____
    __/__
      /\
    /   \
fractalcore
    : )


p.s.

don't be fooled by the angry overtones
in it, 'coz i'm not angry at all; in fact,
i'm in too deep to chicken out.

7 May 10

Rated 10 (7.4) by 3 users.
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Comments:

I like the images.  It will take me a few more readings to understand it properly.
 — wiccanhot

l7 'the' takes it out of the roll you've got going here - "eternity is so beautiful it sucks!" is simply gold and the end-note is pure reality -- a fractured-delicious poem fer' sure
 — AlchemiA

Love the imagery
 — psychofemale

could be so much fun if you rhymed it up silly and let it dance in the spot.
 — bmikebauer

ignore the cunt bauer.
best way.
 — unknown

Very typically fractlecore; it's like I can tell you apart now.
 — Cerulise

Nice poem stylistically writ.  Though somehow, I read the last line with 'date' at the end.  Nonetheless, enjoyed reading.
 — JKWeb

first stanza is the stongest. the second is my favourite. line 14 is the weakest link.
 — raskolniikov

8-13
Giddy Up!
Floats my boat.

Well done chap.
:)
 — mandolyn

YES line 14!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 — unknown

So much math O-o

but I appreciate it none the less ^_^
 — Callisto

wiccanhot,

thank you so much for your indulgence.
: )
 — fractalcore

ey Alc,

that's strange -- it sounds just right by my metronome, hehe...
which reminds me of some good hank poem from a long time ago.

thanks for stopping by.
; )
 — fractalcore

hi psychofemale,

now how do i imagine you?
a psychotic but nice female, hmmm...

i mean, thanks so much.
; )
 — fractalcore

mike,

this is the best i can do and i think it matches my mood just right.
although i'd be happy to see your own version of it.

; )
 — fractalcore

unk,

kunt ignore him or you --
no other way, sorry.

butt tanks fur stomping

bye.
; )
 — fractalcore

Cerulise,

if i use the unknown function next time,
will you still be able to tell me apart?

or, will you tear me apart?

er, thanks so much for reading.
; )
 — fractalcore

JKWebster sir,

that 'date' can work as a faint echo at the end, hehe,
but the 'a-due' there is actually a broken 'adieu'.

thank you always for your kindness.
thanks for the fave.

; )
 — fractalcore

ey rask!!!

you're back!!!
i'm glad, my friend.

thanks for stopping by.
; )
 — fractalcore

hi, rubber mind-thee.

what image[s] do you see in
those lines? you see, they
boot my flute so well, hehe.

; )
 — fractalcore

unk,

DITTO!

; )
 — fractalcore

hi Callisto,

it's the exact same amount --
no more, no less, hehe.

thanks so much for reading.
; )
 — fractalcore

boompfh...
: )
 — fractalcore

as of today, december 22, 2011 [PST],
things have changed their course in my
paradigm, and this poem has found its
rightful recipient,

my black swan.


---{@


     ____
    __/__
      /\
    /   \
fractalore
     : )
 — fractalcore

fracta lore?
?
 — unknown

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wS7CZIJVxFY&feature=share

:p
 — fractalcore

damn, i missed the 'c' in my moniker!
talk about paradigm shi[f]ts, hahaha...

thanks, unk!
; )
 — fractalcore

wee elk home u
r
 — unknown

i guess 'light', in that case, is out of the question.
:p
 — fractalcore

just wondering why not 'en vivo'..oh there, i didn't know it's roman: iv
.i think this was rated long before
 — softyetharsh

You are good at saying nothing particular. Your footnotes try to say this was inspired by someone cat you write as if you are running you spike your words into saying i am clever. You can only be that if you write for others not yourself.
 — unknown

how does one know about rightful recipient?
 — unknown

too easy to be swept like this but it takes too much to seriously note.

someday i'd be writing in its likeness. thanks.
 — unknown

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