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after pumping his gas...
OCTOGENARIAN

he buys a box of condoms
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so he can look into the assuming eyes of the gas station attendant
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to feel for that one moment
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like there really is
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some Tracy or Elizabeth or Sandra
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11 May 10

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lol
 — psychofemale

HA! This is awesome.
 — mandolyn

i'm not sure of the women's names, because they're all movie-star names, and that would make them goddesses to the gas station guy, and cognitively, we don't know if the attendant is a boy or girl, and so this maybe is about the gesture of buying condoms and writing that in public, in a poem... like, if it were in a food store and the author bought a box of 'power bars', would it make any difference in the banality of saying? -- to prove that you have a life, is to show someone your moves, and the loser part is very real. in a way, a poem is like that, showing the world that you know what you're supposed to do, even if you're frozen in place and can't.
 — bmikebauer

This is right up my (kate and) alley!  This snippet could easily be worked into a larger piece, if that's where it wants to go.  The last line with the women's names could be smoothed out a little... a 3 syllable name, then 2, then 1 with only one or before the last.

Very cleaver and current and hip!!
 — jpmhawk

Another egg and soldiers glimpse, methinks - bravo, wish I'd written it.
 — Abracadabra

Love it, Octo. Were you close to home...  heh!
 — unknown

lol jmp! haha, love the word play.
 — mandolyn

Err I mean jpm
 — mandolyn

have a good night?
 — unknown

Oh wow, never thought of that =]
 — Callisto

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