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A shot at happiness
Bookworm

Happiness comes freely
 1
you don't have to try
 2
trying makes you sad
 3
crying makes you mad
 4
madness makes you try
 5
sadness clouds the eye
 6
now at square one
 7
it's already done
 8
there's just no turning back
 9
so just sit back and laugh
 10

25 May 10

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I like it it's catchy and has an intresting meaning
 — unknown

This is elementary.
Laugh is spelled wrong.
But nice thought.
:)
 — mandolyn

This is not elementary.
Well put.
 — unknown

Love this!!!!!!!!!!!!
 — psychofemale

Thank u phycofemale:)
 — Bookworm

excellent.
 — unknown

oh i love the Title! it makes a lot of sense, for me anyway, creative, sad but than i have to smile
 — Hulda

pure wisdom
 — unknown

you are 13 Bookworm. you are beautiful, and a zen master could not have said this any better.
 — unknown

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 — unknown

beautiful, quite.
 — unknown

8D
 — unknown

Bookworm, for 13 this is insightful and wise. Keep writing, you have much to say.
Bless your heart, this is very well done. I took this to heart, to just let go and quit trying so hard. We have everything we need to be happy, if we will accept it. Love to you.
 — unknown

Thanks everyone!!!:) :D <3333 you all are wonderful writers!!:)
 — Bookworm

This poem is now in top rated.  Am taking a screen cap, and posting on other poetry sites.  Too funny.

--Maximus
 — unknown

Shoot me full of rap stars, radishes, sandwiches and dance studios
 — bbmikebauer

Maximus what do you mean posting on other sites? I would I hope I recieve credit I mean I wrote it. Lol
 — Bookworm

Bookworm.  What do you mean you want to receive credit?  This is non-credible.  Incredulous even.
 — unknown

You or someone I'm not quite sure said the wanted to post my poem on other sites, but I was wondering if this person was taking it as their own. Also I wanted to know where so I can see it :) lol
 — Bookworm

Not bad, Booky, for pre-high-school - not bad at all. Try sadness blinds/blurs/clouds rather than hurts - and try "there's no turning back / just sit down and laugh"  to avoid repeating 'back'. cheerz. Mitch :-)
 — pdemitchell

Thank you Mitch:) I will consider revising that very well put u especially like the idea of replacing "hurts"
 — Bookworm

I dig it :)
I might fiddle the last line
 — technomancer

On a reread I think 2-7 are going strong and the rest is a bit cliche
 — technomancer

Yes but sometimes cliche is te way to get your point accross and where did you put the poem?
 — Bookworm

Now I'm lead to beleive you're only 13, I have to say, you have more depth than a majority of, so called adults I have met. Yes seem very intouch with your emotion. Well done
 — heidionfire

Fear is the path to the Dark Side.
Fear leads to anger.
Anger leads to hate.
Hate leads to suffering.
 — SeanConnery

Thank you heidonfire:) and yes am 13 well just turned 14 not too long ago. :)
 — Bookworm

wonderful
 — Empty

You don't need your footnote anymore.

Enjoyed it.
 — rocket

Ooh ur right! Haha and I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for comenting:)
 — Bookworm

This is great Bookworm May I ask what inspired you to write this?
 — Empty

Well done for others liking it
 — unknown

hmm

I'm searching for this deep meaning that people are suggesting...and I just don't see it... even so, nice enough poem :)
 — mr_e

Empty- actually I'm not exactly sure what made me write this. Actually, my mom is always trying so hard to be happy and instead she winds up remaining stressed. So I figured if people tried to stop feeling a certain way, they may actually feel happier in time. Too many people try to force ther emotions.... Emotions don't work like that.
-Sam
 — Bookworm

Sam- Very wise. It's like the story of the butterfly that would never land on the boy, because he was chasing it.  I think this is one of your best.
Take care.
- Justin
 — Empty

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