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swell but not swollen
fractalcore

daze
 1
 
 
numbered
 2
twoo.close,
 3
so mine's the duty:
 4
two merge
 5
the lines, on the bus
 6
converge --
 7
 
 
lady on a tryst,
 8
fairy-dust n' eyes
 9
speak lofty, nasty even
 10
heart rests
 11
hidden
 12
so,
 13
 
 
they
 14
say it ease[s]
 15
the answer;
 16
they
 17
saw the train leave,
 18
live in embers...
 19
 
 
days
 20
 
 
twoo long for
 21
the roads in thee
 22
count-trees-i'd,
 23
aye wood[s];
 24
 
 
cooed have the doves --
 25
 
 
for-in lovefools'
 26
beagle-skies
 27
 
 
they
 28
s[t]ay
 29
 
 
hey
 30
hi[gh].
 31




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for Diana Jiganie, my nisetru,
bestest friend & soulmate.

---{@


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fractalcore
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2 Jun 10

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Interesting. I always love your formatting.
 — psychofemale

thanks, psycho...
female.

; )
 — fractalcore

may i know what else you like about it
besides the format?

: )
 — fractalcore

Excellent write.  Cool title.  Not sure I understand line 24 but the rest is $$$.
 — JKWeb

word to ya muthah fra-cool- as- ice.
:)
 — mandolyn

i hear it everytime :)...swell but not swollen ;)
 — softyetharsh

covered both eyes and it made more sense

mikedour
 — unknown

thanks, JKWebster sir.

|24 is supposed to read as
'i would' or 'aye/yes woods'.

: )
 — fractalcore

fract-choo-erred weirds twoo
thee moth-hers: eyes coo'll.

thanks, rubbee mander.
: )
 — fractalcore

hi, softyetharsh.

do you mean to say you always hear
it play like a broken record?

: )
 — fractalcore

hello, mikedour.

maybe you're beginning
to learn the language of
the turd kind.

i'm glad.
; )
 — fractalcore

love your stuff

have enjoyed each and every one while here at PC
thank you
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