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  (      (       (        (
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The work of an arsonist
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and the pyro-practitioner
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beat
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feet
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near the pier-
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fled
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from
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the
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crime
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scene.
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            The
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            boat
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           drifted
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           afloat,
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           tried to
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            defeat
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            the
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            heat-
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           flames
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           licked
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                       the sky.  The residents
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                       awoke choking in thick
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                       black                   smoke
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                       and                      were
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                       too slow…fire forked
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                       lungs                and
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                       they                  died.
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                       Flesh                 melted,
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                       bones               thinned.
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                       Mirror                shards
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                                                                on shore reflected
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                                                                victims charred re-
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                                                                mains
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                                                                again.
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                                                                The perp’s plan to
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                                                                escape,
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                                                                evade
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                                                                capture,
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                                                                having set deadly
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                                                                fire to his friends.
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18 Jun 10

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mutton dressed aqs lamb.
 — unknown

Arbeitsgemeinschaft zur Förderung der Qualitätssicherung in der Medizin ?
 — JKWeb

sweet -- aspire to fire I always say ... we're Natures Agents of Change with a purpose intimately connected to her. Even in death, we're utilized for the stuff we transmuted while alive; recycled. Then, as the Earth aspires to become a Star, (the Dream of every Planet is to become a Star,) we'll transcend to a blissful bursting born of Cosmic forces, the furnace of Stars; from Stars we come, to Stars we'll return, but first through the lowly worm.

nice concrete poement...
 — AlchemiA

From Stars we come to Stars we shall return. Look up! Dream Up! Love up! Burn!
 — AlchemiA

the corruption of stone, fugitive pieces of rock, far away from home --

All dirt is made from Mountains and Mountains are made from Fire and a Star exploded in ancient space for all this to transpire. So I'm DIRT you know, a stone weathering into clay, the language of Mountain written in the dust blowing, blown so far away! From dirt I come, to Stars I'll return, through this fire aspiring inside my longing yearn to burn...a mote in the eye of God, slow-diving toward a black-hole in the heart of space, where dust like me and you, gathers unseen from all over the place ...
 — AlchemiA

WOWS! This is awesome!!!
 — psychofemale

Thanks AlchemiA
for the read and comments.  I appreciate your insight for sure.

Namaste  
 — JKWeb

Mucho grats psychofemale--
glad you like.

Rock on.
 — JKWeb

This sounds like Web ( and I have not rated or scrolled down yet to check)
:)
 — mandolyn

YAY! I was right and Web I love this one~
 — mandolyn

Oh and I give an extra smile to the title-- love the font!
 — mandolyn

impressive beyond all reason :)
 — Tandisol

Many thanks mandolyn
for reading and kudos.

Thanks Tandisol-
I'm glad you gave it an IBAR as opposed to a FUBAR.


Namaste...
 — JKWeb

100% HOT!  (and tight!)  LOVE the layout too!  :-)
 — starr

Many thanks starr man.
Appreciate it much.
 — JKWeb

whoa!
hot, hot, hot!

; )
 — fractalcore

how did you get your u's to do that?
 — unknown

Thank you fractalcore
for having a look.  'preciate the nod.
 — JKWeb

Thanks for reading unknown.
the font is from word...the insert part
then copy and paste.
 — JKWeb

Way cool JKWebb
 — unknown

Thanks unknown one
for reading and the two-word plaudit.
 — JKWeb

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