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Prayer for Fergus After Mother's Death (II)
uncjaf

I found you
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beneath the Sala trees,
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held together by the straps
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of Her corduroy-jeans.
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Please Fergus,
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when you touch the earth, touch the earth.
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If I could remove my hands
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from this shadow.
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The body unenduring,  
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Her oatmeal flesh naturally softened,
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swollen limbs settled  
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beyond this dark interval.
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In wet soil as we abandoned Her
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with a final glimpse.
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We screw together in languages
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guilt and remembrance.
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Fergus, can we retrace the grief
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back to that moment?
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Begin.  
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If I could dig into our past,
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rummaging in ash,
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kicking-up grief through soul, soil and stars,
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I would
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if given-a-chance to skim old-arguments,
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rude, they await rebirth
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from the surface of ġemynd.
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If I could bend the day.
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I will carry proof along the blade of a knife,
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bury it into the atmosphere of His chest,
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I will carve your God into a million grains past.
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10 Jul 10

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It is a good edit. Tighter. Cleaner. Still brilliant.
 — DianaTrees

Made a few more edits. Any thoughts on this people? DianaTrees - TY as always for your kind encouragement.
 — uncjaf

:)
 — psychofemale

any help is much appreciated! Bmike, I could use a tough crit here
 — uncjaf

gulp. s2 and 6...gosh.  my mouth went dry.
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