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here's to you future
psychofemale

raise the chalice
 1
toast to the one
 2
who left you
 3
marooned
 4
 
 
where skeletons rest
 5
and ships have wrecked
 6
where the remnant rum
 7
tastes stronger
 8
than ever
 9
 
 
the jug
 10
half full
 11
but more potent
 12
than it could ever
 13
have been
 14
when
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it was
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crisp
 17
in the sun
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now washed onto the island
 19
with everything else
 20
long forgotten
 21
 
 
including me
 22
 
 
I hope your vessel crashes
 23
and a shark
 24
eats your intestines
 25
 
 
and you wash up one day
 26
only bones
 27

here's to your future......drink

21 Jul 10

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*applauds.

Cheers! ♥
 — mandolyn

wow psycho, didn't know this was yours. this is your best it. really.
 — mandolyn

^ omit 'it' in my previous statement.
 — mandolyn

Cool poem.  Maybe omit 'way' from line 11 ?  Also, better without lines 24-25 ?  Otherwise, melikes.  I'll toast to that...
 — JKWeb

wow guys thank you so much :D
 — psychofemale

Your favorite band sucks
 — Quen

um?
 — psychofemale

wtf are you talking about?
 — psychofemale

anyone else?
 — psychofemale

don't mind quen, he's a butt nugget. sincerely -mandee
:)
 — unknown

slade?
 — bmikebauer

whoa!
; )
 — fractalcore

thanks guys :)
 — psychofemale

are you captain jack sparrow?
 — unknown

hmm...wondering why this is top rated...
 — psychofemale

yes and no
 — 13fatstacks

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